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My Heart's Beating

my heart's beating why don't you see in coffin why you do want me rowing my unknown lonely boat in dark sea playing sad eighth note time's short when life will be set free least my strength will last embrace me extreme pain's drifting in mind's tree don't want to die save my life boat my heart's beating from you and me we became three in early life we smiled with glee you were seen as queen in great coat now doubt my life's lost that i wrote a broken box have lost my key my heart's beating Sponsored by: Laura Loo Contest Description: BEST RONDEAU POEM

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Lynn Marie

Date: 8/19/2016 8:28:00 PM

A most philosophical piece, layered with rich emotions that go straight to my heart :-) I adore your "thinking pieces"..this one combining boats and the ocean(two faves) and heartbreak (not so much)..lol :-). Wonderful writing, a pleasure to read. blessings, lynn My first ever read of a "Rondeau", a fave to read and a fave for high learning value :-)

Bl Devnath
Date: 8/20/2016 10:50:00 AM

Thanks my friend for wonderful comment and high appreciation and for enlisting in your favorite list. Hugs, Cloudy poet, bl

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/1/2016 4:08:00 PM

you did a great job with your rondeau. I enjoyed this

Bl Devnath
Date: 8/2/2016 11:18:00 AM

Thanks my friend for your appreciation. Hugs, Cloudy Poet