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My Heart's Beating

my heart's beating why don't you see
                              in coffin why you do want me 
                              rowing my unknown lonely boat 
                              in dark sea playing sad eighth note
                              time's short when life will be set free

                              least my strength will last embrace me
                              extreme pain's drifting in mind's tree
                              don't want to die save my life boat
                              my heart's beating

                             from you and me we became three 
                             in early life we smiled with glee
                             you were seen as queen in great coat
                             now doubt my life's lost that i wrote
                             a broken box have lost my key
                             my heart's beating  


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Lynn Marie Date: 8/19/2016 8:28:00 PM A most philosophical piece, layered with rich emotions that go straight to my heart :-) I adore your "thinking pieces"..this one combining boats and the ocean(two faves) and heartbreak (not so much)..lol :-). Wonderful writing, a pleasure to read. blessings, lynn My first ever read of a "Rondeau", a fave to read and a fave for high learning value :-) Login to Reply Bl Devnath Date: 8/20/2016 10:50:00 AM Thanks my friend for wonderful comment and high appreciation and for enlisting in your favorite list. Hugs, Cloudy poet, bl

Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/1/2016 4:08:00 PM you did a great job with your rondeau. I enjoyed this Login to Reply Bl Devnath Date: 8/2/2016 11:18:00 AM Thanks my friend for your appreciation. Hugs, Cloudy Poet