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contest- Abandon

sponsor Constance La France

The dark road of misery led me to a more abhorrent realm of existence when I succumbed to your disguise before you abandoned my heart in your pleasured dungeon of dreariness where your veins flowed with emotionless blood as you spoke your final words, cold, calculating that fell upon my ears like a winter's rain this landscape of illusion has become barren where lips once pressed the flesh of our desires to claim my soul...now has turned to vile contempt for the lifeless bouquets from a garden of promises I feel the sting of poison pump through each heartbeat as I wander in a lonely black silence towards a Bastone of bitter bile where my heart awaits its fate of cupped hands clinging to my face like talons as I crumble to my knees...abandon in a dark and desolate sob-filled tomorrow

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Date: 5/26/2025 4:43:00 AM
Very descriptive winning work. Way to go. Congratulations. Sara K
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Date: 5/24/2025 10:45:00 AM
- Congratulations on your win in the contest "Abandon", Frederic :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs
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Date: 5/20/2025 11:29:00 PM
Dear frederick this is so deeply emotive and soul stirring! I absolutely love your wordplay and flow of lines in this! So exquisite and evocative! Your poems always have that pulse, which gets readers to feel something when we read them! I absolutely love especially the line “ for the lifeless bouquets from a garden of promises I feel the sting of poison pump through each heartbeat” how powerful! And well articulated! Youv written very well for the prompt as always! You are definitely one of the most talented poets on soup! And i enjoy reading your poems always! Best wishes! Sending you light always
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Date: 5/20/2025 5:33:00 AM
- Omg this was deep... dark and very sensitive, Frederic - Best wishes in the contest... love it :) - hugs
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Date: 5/19/2025 2:03:00 AM
heart rendering, lovely sketch from your pen, frederick!
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Date: 5/18/2025 11:41:00 AM
So beautiful.. and the musical background set the perfect mood for me to descend into melancholy decadence.. perfection!
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