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My Frozen Heart

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A smattering of snowflakes had fallen overnight, covering your grave with a delicate lacy shawl. I brush away bitter tears, desperately wishing you were tucked up snuggled and warm in your nursery, not lying in the stone cold ground. my precious child never took his first breath born sleeping FICTION POEM FOR - Haibun pick your theme Poetry Contest Sponsored By Line Gauthier 07/15/20

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/14/2020 1:15:00 PM

Back for congrats, Jan! First place win!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2020 1:26:00 PM

Many thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 8/14/2020 11:01:00 AM

Born sleeping is a wonderful line! Congrats on your win.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2020 1:26:00 PM

Many thanks Krish:-) hugs Jan xx

Jcb Brul

Date: 8/14/2020 12:25:00 AM

Splendid piece dear Jan!!..Congratulations on your 1st place win!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2020 1:25:00 PM

Many thanks EJCB Burl:-) hugs Jan xx

Aditi Mishra

Date: 8/13/2020 6:00:00 PM

Jan this is so heartwrenching and deeply marked with your brilliance of portraying strong emotions. Congratulations on your top win :) Much love!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2020 1:23:00 PM

Many thanks Aditi:-) hugs Jan xx

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 8/13/2020 12:26:00 PM

This haibun gives such a heartrending and moving portrayal of oppressive loss. An amazing poem and picture. Congratulations on your win.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/21/2020 1:22:00 PM

Many thanks Evelyn:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray

Date: 8/13/2020 10:30:00 AM

Jan, just reading number one now. So heartfelt, I got a jolt! Condolonces and congradulations all at once.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2020 10:39:00 AM

Pure fiction for me jean but i guess in your career you have had to deal with the devastation of stillbirth:-( hugs Jan xx

Curtis Johnson

Date: 8/13/2020 9:51:00 AM

Congrats on your well-deserved top placement. Thanks for sharing. Blessings.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2020 10:11:00 AM

thanks so much Curtis:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 8/13/2020 9:20:00 AM

Back with congratulations, Jan! There was never any doubt that this would be a winner.....and placing 1st is awesome! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2020 10:10:00 AM

thanks Paul i am absolutely thrilled:-) hugs jan xx

Ann Gilmour

Date: 8/13/2020 6:27:00 AM

Oh such a beautiful heartfelt haibun dearest Jan it really touched my heart and so happy Line awarded you top place in her contest... With kindest thoughts Ann xx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2020 10:07:00 AM

Thanks Ann I was so delighted with my win:-) hugs jan xx

Jenna Logan

Date: 8/12/2020 4:49:00 PM

I don't mind placing 3rd to your lovely writing, Jan. Congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/13/2020 10:06:00 AM

aww thanks Jenna I rarely get a first place on my own so I am delighted:-) hugs Jan xx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/12/2020 1:40:00 PM

WOW!!! Congratulations on your win. A beautiful poem and picture. Enjoy your win and day...........

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2020 3:56:00 PM

Thanks so much Paula:-) hugs Jan xx

Tania Kitchin

Date: 8/12/2020 12:24:00 PM

Back to congratulate you Jan on your trophy win!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2020 3:55:00 PM

thanks so much Tania I am delighted:-)-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 8/12/2020 11:26:00 AM

Congratulations Jan. You really know how to write those.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2020 3:52:00 PM

thanks so much Janis i really enjoy writing this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/12/2020 9:50:00 AM

Congratulations Jan! Heart wrenching grief expressed beautifully. Deeply touching.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2020 3:51:00 PM

thanks so much Sam:-) hugs Jan xx

John Watt

Date: 8/12/2020 9:23:00 AM

Not surprised at all that this took first place, Jan! Powerful words, emotive and deep, great use of nature to reinforce the cold, hard feelings after one dies. Congratulations for your trophy win ~ John

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2020 3:48:00 PM

thanks so much John i do enjoy writing the haibun form:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta

Date: 8/12/2020 9:19:00 AM

SO DEEP. Intense grief yearning warmth. Well deserved First Place,

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2020 3:48:00 PM

Thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/12/2020 9:13:00 AM

What a expression of grief you've written. It's depth is beautiful and warm and touches the heart to the core. I love it. God bless you and congrats on your win. Love to you

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2020 3:47:00 PM

thanks so much Regina:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Koplin

Date: 8/12/2020 9:10:00 AM

Congrats on your well deserved 1st place win Jan!! Good job and an excellent work of art.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/12/2020 3:47:00 PM

thanks so much Mark:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 7/18/2020 3:34:00 PM

Fiction, but it still manages to pull at our heart strings. Looking forward to see this on the winners' list! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2020 11:58:00 AM

Thanks Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 7/18/2020 11:33:00 AM

I know this is fiction and I am so glad it is. I lost my first born at 5 days old - it was heartbreaking. Sad but beautifully told. - Good Luck Jan. Hugs and blessings my friend. Jennifer.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2020 11:57:00 AM

aww jennifer that is so heartbreaking you have experienced the death of your precious child:-( hugs Jan xx

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 7/17/2020 2:06:00 PM

Nice penning Jan, fine wording indeed. Trust you're well these days, Blessings always,Gordon

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2020 11:55:00 AM

I'm fine thanks Gordon, over 2 months covid free - all is good for now:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/17/2020 8:59:00 AM

Thanks for your visit Jan. Hugs Rick.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2020 11:55:00 AM

Thanks again:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/17/2020 8:58:00 AM

Thankfully it’s fictional. You did bring the poem to life/death with your words. Hugs Rick.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2020 11:54:00 AM

thanks Rick:-) hugs jan xx

Pashang Salehi

Date: 7/16/2020 5:16:00 PM

Wow... Jan, I came for a smile and now this... Hope it is just for a contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2020 11:54:00 AM

hi sweet friend, yes just for a contest:-) hugs JAN XX

Rico Leffanta

Date: 7/16/2020 1:54:00 PM

When nine-months lasts a lifetime! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2020 4:43:00 PM

that is oh so true Rico thankfully for me its fictional but its stark reality for others:-( hugs jan xx