My Fingers Froze On Sultry Noon

I was obsessed
with a thought of winning her
but my true feelings she never assessed
yet hope I lost never
hoping that positivity wins ever
I continued to impress with feelings pure and true 
she smiled, said meet at marriage court next hour
madly joyous, dreamt proposal-cum-marriage, wait worth due

There she was with her fiancé, me not having any clue   
my world came crashing down
she just wanted me to be witness for their vows “ I do”
my fingers froze on sultry noon 
still somehow signed the Register
thinking destiny wishing for me something better

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Rhyme scheme - ababbcbc cdcdee
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© Hitendra Mehta 
Placed 4th in Members Contest – The Spenserian Sonnet by Dr Ram
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 3/16/2011 12:28:00 PM
Yike Hitu this was a hard row to hoe, another sad one, mine too ends badly! Congrad's on your fine win! Light & Love
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Date: 3/16/2011 8:19:00 AM
Congratulations in the contest of Dr. Ram Mehta "The Spenserian Sonnet" Hitendra. A well deserved winner. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/15/2011 10:45:00 AM
If she had known how you felt about her, she probably wouldn't have invited you to be a witness at her wedding. Excellent twist in your sonnet, Hitendra. Congratulations on your win in Dr. Ram's contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 3/15/2011 8:43:00 AM
Awesome to see you at the top again Hitendra. Congratulations on your quite worthy poem's honored fourth place. Agape, Moses
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Date: 3/15/2011 8:24:00 AM
Congrats Hitendra on your wonderful win in Dr. Ram's Sonnet contest with these elegant words ..my friend... a truly stunning write... enjoy your top ten with luv..
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Date: 3/15/2011 7:59:00 AM
Congratulations on the fourth place win in my contest, Hitendra
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Date: 3/2/2011 5:22:00 AM
Good old Destiny ... one can only hope she is kind to us all.. Hitendra a most intriguing write with an interesting title to accompany your poetry ..enhancing every line... appreciate your sweet comments to my poetry my friend.. means very much ..thankxx..luv..
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Date: 2/24/2011 10:18:00 AM
ouch!! Very intriguing title and your write justifies it-- I sure hope this is just fiction, Hitendra! Wish you the best in the contest & thanks for gracious comments & heads up on my note-- will edit it :)
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Date: 2/22/2011 12:42:00 PM
enjoyed the write Hitendra, quite a few levels here.
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