my dirty bird bath

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Poetic Form: Tanka
Inspired: 2023 December 21
Image: Dust Bath by Urban Wildlife Guide

bird bath near blossoms wrens fussy in my dirt bath pigeons wait their turn parasites and oils dust off just leave a dirt bath for birds

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/21/2023 2:43:00 PM

reminds me of our bird bath...it gets dirty so quickly especially during our hot months. Thank you for capturing that scene. Have a great evening, Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/21/2023 3:23:00 PM

Lol, Sara. I guess you're not in for a trade ... anyway, while its on my mind, as we say here in Hawaii, "Mele Kalikimaka a Hau'oli Maka Hiki Hou 2024, Aloha, William and the family.

Silent One

Date: 12/21/2023 11:42:00 AM

your poem beautifully captures a moment of nature's poetry, inviting readers to reflect on the delicate dance between birds and their environment. The simplicity of the language enhances the power of the imagery, making it a compelling and enjoyable piece. ..

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/21/2023 12:14:00 PM

Aloha, Silent One. Winter's our rainy months that last through Summer--living on the eastern end/windward side. Power flickers during rainstorms--like presently. Yes, though I don't tend to my garden but my bird bath fronts my home and if the wrens/sparrows, etc. get too close for comfort, the chirping intensifies (Continue--->

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/21/2023 12:14:00 PM

<---Continue) -- the species take turns, and usually its in their numbers that cause the lesser to fly away. Aloha William

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 12/21/2023 11:29:00 AM

Hello Hillo Poet, Merry Christmas. All the best for the New Year. Bird baths can get dirty. They have to be cleaned often. Merry Christmas. /Darlene/

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 12/21/2023 2:52:00 PM

Aloha Hillo Poet, I am guessing that you are wishing me a Merry Christmas & a Happy New Year. Am i right William? All the best for the New Year. /Darlene/

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/21/2023 11:55:00 AM

Aloha, Darlene. Hilo Poet thanks you for your beautiful commentary. We say in Hawaiian, "Mele Kalikimaka a Hauoli Maka Hiki Hou 2024. Mahalo, William in Hawaii