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My Cherished Bloom

Intravenous tubes disconnect her thoughts As the machine beeps without relent I stare blankly at the monitor's screen And as the lines rise and fall My hopes fall and rise too Suddenly the lines go flat, I freeze with fear! My heart skips many a beat The nurses rush in, but death does not retreat My hopes wither and die right there A flower once bloomed in the garden of my heart her season too brief crimson petals bleeding tears gone too soon, my cherished bloom --~-- 8/31/16 Contest: Challenge - Write One Sponsor: Broken Wings

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Date: 9/16/2016 1:11:00 PM
Joseph, a sad sweet write.
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Date: 9/9/2016 3:10:00 PM
I felt the deep sadness in your poem, Joseph...but how beautifully you brought your emotion to us in your words. Congratulations on your First Place win. Sandra
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Date: 9/9/2016 10:41:00 AM
Joseph, congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautiful write ~
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Date: 9/9/2016 9:13:00 PM
Thank you for my top placement Constance
Date: 9/9/2016 10:12:00 AM
A sad, touching and heartbreaking poem Joseph. I enjoyed the buildup and the lovely ending. ~ Congratulations on placing first. Regards // paul
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Date: 9/9/2016 9:54:00 AM
My eyes welled up on this one,very beautiful Joseph!
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Date: 9/9/2016 9:04:00 AM
A lump in my throat with this one, such delicate poetry with deep impact on the readers emotions! A winning #7 rating and congrats too, warm regards, Laura.
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Date: 9/9/2016 7:34:00 AM
oh how sad Joseph, but beautifully written :)congrats on your top placement! :)-luloo
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Date: 9/8/2016 6:24:00 PM
This is so lovely Joseph! I'm so happy to see it take first placement. Congratulations my friend. : ) 7
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Date: 9/8/2016 6:18:00 PM
Happened on this one again. Did I not fave it. I am going to. It's so good.
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Date: 9/8/2016 5:44:00 PM
Emptiness when death comes. Sad. Congrats on a heartfelt write!
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Date: 9/1/2016 2:07:00 AM
Excellent write but sad. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 8/31/2016 3:14:00 PM
oh my goodness. Such a sad one, Joseph! Very nicely thought up and executed.
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Date: 8/31/2016 2:29:00 PM
This is sad but written extremely well, Joseph. I really love it. A7
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