My Brother's Keeper

Am I my brother's keeper?  I'm suppose to be.
But you continuously dig deeper in misery.
A sad state you put our love in.
You can be my brother but not my friend?!

Blood is thicker than water, so they tell me.
But my heart is left for the slaughter unfortunately.
I wonder how a brother could turn his back on his own?
I ponder if you'll even care when I'm dead and gone.

When I call on you, where you at?
You leave the world to walk over me like the bottom of a doormat!
I'm your brother 'til the end, that's reality.
You allowed your pride to destroy your spirituality.

Am I my brother's keeper?  I am, and I will always be!
It's a guarantee we will forever remain family!!!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 1/27/2010 12:37:00 PM
Nice effort to do a Sonnet. Try to see if you can get a slyable count of 10 or 12 throughout. And ending a sentence with at...is particulary not appropriate for a formal form like a sonnet. Very very nice to see you try a different form! Light & Love (soup mail)
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Date: 1/22/2010 11:34:00 AM
My Jimmy, this is truly a deep, emotional write, inviting introspection by us all. Great poem! I love this. My SM's still doesn't work PM rec'd so PM to follow!! Much love, Audrey*
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Date: 1/22/2010 8:31:00 AM
An interesting write. Packed with your emotion, Jimmy. Write on!
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