My Bmi

Like a king I sit upon my throne over time with affluence I've grown friends, and family are now not known through life style I now live all alone, once fit, healthy body sleek with tone of a brave gladiator of Rome this situation I can't condone self belief, selflessness must be shown my life being cut short, can't postpone pity will not solve my plight I groan all failures must now be overthrown especially at thirty one stone. 05/11/2017 Two word challenge contest Sponsored by John Lawless.

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Susan Ashley

Date: 11/13/2017 7:56:00 PM

I love your take on the contest theme Roy. Original and creative with excellent rhymes and content. Wonderfully expressed and enjoyed! Good luck in the contest!

Roy Pett
Date: 11/17/2017 5:18:00 AM

Thank you so much for your very kind comment Susan, it is sometimes hard to know what the sponsor is looking for so unfortunately failed in this one, thanks again your support is always appreciated. :))

Jan Allison

Date: 11/12/2017 3:29:00 PM

what a fabulous take on the one stone theme Roy, I initially considered a poem about weight but the poem I wrote instead got a weight off my mind!:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett
Date: 11/13/2017 10:25:00 AM

Thank you so much Jan, I understand writing about our traumas in a poetic way helps us though I can't understand how anyone can be so hurtful as described in your heartbreaking entry in this contest, we must keep on writing.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/10/2017 7:20:00 PM

wow, you found a GREAT way to fit in ONE STONE!! It really gets hard with age to keep that weight off. WEll done and unique.

Roy Pett
Date: 11/11/2017 5:00:00 AM

Thank you so much for your very kind comment Andrea, this is not about me, though my bmi is 31 which classes me as obese?? 5' 10" and 15 stone and fit as a fiddle, thanks again for your support.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/5/2017 9:31:00 AM

Unique theme Roy--rhyme very well done--best for a win!

Roy Pett
Date: 11/5/2017 10:01:00 AM

Thank you Vijay, as usual I wonder if I'm on theme, thanks again for your support and best wishes much appreciated. :))