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M words Writing Challenge Poetry Contest Sponsored by Constnace La France

07/22/23

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I’d seen him lurking in the shadows He’d been stalking me for hours All alone in the house I was at his mercy Finally, he backed me into a corner I let out a blood curdling scream startled, he ran off in a blind panic directly into the jaws of the mousetrap I’d set It closed with a loud SNAP Who needs a cat… adieu pesky mouse!

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Joanna Daniel
Date: 7/25/2023 2:36:00 AM
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What a twist to the tale, Jan, congratulations:)
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2023 10:18:00 AM
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Thanks Jo:-) hugs jan xx
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Paula Goldsmith
Date: 7/24/2023 11:01:00 AM
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Congratulations on your win. What a creative/fun write. Great ending. Have a great day with your win......................
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2023 12:59:00 PM
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thanks so much paula xx
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Christuraj Alex
Date: 7/23/2023 9:21:00 PM
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A great and thrilling narration. Congratulations!
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2023 12:59:00 PM
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thanks so much, hugs jan xx
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 7/23/2023 3:39:00 PM
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Good one, Jan! Had me fooled for a sec there, lol. Congrats on your win!
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2023 3:43:00 PM
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thanks Edward:-) hugs Jan xx
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/23/2023 5:27:00 AM
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Wow! This was great - fantastic twist! …and who was the murderer…lol! Happy Sunday, dear Jan! Stay safe from those pesky rodents!
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2023 5:48:00 AM
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Thanks Kim it was fun to write:-) hugs jan xx
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Terry Flood
Date: 7/22/2023 4:29:00 PM
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Sure got me there, Jan. Didn’t see that coming… so I’m on a par with a pesky rodent… thanks for that! Seriously… love it!
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/22/2023 4:30:00 PM
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thanks Terry:-) hugs Jan xx
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Ilene Bauer
Date: 7/22/2023 1:51:00 PM
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Ha! You fooled me! Great job, Jan!
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/22/2023 4:28:00 PM
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thanks Ilene xx hugs jan xx
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Alexis Y.
Date: 7/22/2023 10:03:00 AM
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Hi Jan, This is a good entry for the contest. Good twist at the end. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day and weekend:-) Alexis
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/22/2023 10:04:00 AM
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thanks Alexis, hope you and the family are well, I've just had 5 days on holiday so not been around much to write or comment. hugs jan xx
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Arlo Parker
Date: 7/22/2023 9:10:00 AM
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Well writ, JA. Unexpected climax!!
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/22/2023 9:48:00 AM
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Cheers AP it was fun to go to the dark side for a change lol:-) hugs jan xx
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John Read
Date: 7/22/2023 8:56:00 AM
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You had me worried there for a moment until i read pesky mouse,enjoyed the read Jan hugs john.x
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John Read
Date: 7/22/2023 10:07:00 AM
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Sure she will Jan.xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 7/22/2023 9:47:00 AM
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I hope Constance likes it John:-) hugs jan xx

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