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Some ammendments this morning 14 02 2013
Winne the poo, had nothing to do, one dank and dismal day, as he sat in his chair rather filled With despair, when he heard a noise just plainly as day, it went kinda like squeek..! Did his little chair creak? 'prhaps he had eaten too much honey.. ! Got carried away?? he was fond of that Chair, just perfect for a bear, painted a bright emerald green,with scrollwork in blue; he was Afraid it might break, oh..! Just where would he eat cake? & would his feet always ache? His thoughts they were all a to do.!!! He got up slowly with great care, ( which is harder for bears ) it looked quite strong, As he gazed at it long..... Then loud again came that squeek.." he followed the sound, That came from low down.. To a rug right behind his small seat, and there was a mouse." The first he'd seen in his house, he wondered how-why it was there, he bent down low Hey.." the mouse didn't go..! It L 00 ked into his eyes, that was such a surprise...! Then he saw why it squeeked and squeeked so.." Its small tail was trapped, And yet had not snapped..? It was under the leg of his shiny green chair.." He lifted it clear, Then continued to peer, at the mouse with two big black ears, now how are you named Winnie exclaimed..." Mickey it said rather high, and my tail needs a repair, can you help me My bear?? as I don't have a spare, just you wait right there, Winnie said I will share, maybe There's a bandage somewhere, perhaps in my box of repairs..?? with the patches & string, needles and Things,,! so he quickly ducked under the stairs, and searched it right through, then to mickey he Threw a bandage; to wrap round his tail, for repair, they became such good friends, as the bear made Amends, Mickey said you are fair, a really nice bear.! For now; this poem has come to the end.)

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Date: 10/3/2013 10:37:00 PM
Hope you are well..stopping by to say goodnight...xox~ Linda
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Date: 7/26/2013 6:48:00 PM
Light, yet heavy with a moral message.... Great work, Joe.... Have a great evening... Jake
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Date: 5/26/2013 5:49:00 PM
Joe, Hahahahahahahahaha! you are a maverick. great write and fun too. I really like the rhymes. Thanks for sharing, Randy
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Date: 5/20/2013 3:10:00 PM
Hi, Joe, glad you got the idea of my most recent poetry post. Have a great day. I wish I could say it was a very colorful day, but it's just a rotten grey!!
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Date: 5/6/2013 2:39:00 PM
Remembering this cute one. The way you end it, sounds like another one was coming? (you said, FOR NOW!) Thanks for your recent comments!
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Date: 2/28/2013 3:37:00 PM
lol, love this one - enjoyed it again tonight, Joe. Hope you are well and having a good week : )
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Date: 2/25/2013 7:37:00 PM
Just as Justin wrote below, the moral in this poem is brilliant as it is interwoven with fun rhyme and energy! I am a sucker for a story in rhyme, Joe! Wish u could have seen me reading it out loud at my kitchen table!!! What a hoot! This is wonderful work, friend! Love it in its entirety! God bless, gwendolen
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Date: 2/23/2013 1:17:00 PM
Compassion can lead well to friendship - I respect the moral in this - J.A.B. %
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Date: 2/14/2013 2:55:00 PM
You obviously could write fairy tale stories with a rhyme and flow, to tickle littlle n old children you should know, story teller u r it! n a bit, ho ho ho...Try it Joe , mate....thats it..
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Date: 2/14/2013 8:58:00 AM
Hello my dear poet friend, Joe. So glad to read again this very interesting poem of yours in my contest. Well, I'm stopping by also to greet you and your love ones a very happy Valentines Day! love/hugs, Leonora
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Date: 2/9/2013 8:39:00 PM
Hi Joe, stopping by to say hi, and check out all of Leonora's fun and fabulous contest Pooh and Disney tooooo winners*LOL :-) love your poem ... Good-night ~ LINDA "
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Date: 2/9/2013 11:59:00 AM
congrats on your win in the contest Joe
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Date: 2/9/2013 9:23:00 AM
Congratulations my dear friend Joe on your win and great entry in my “Disney Kids/Winnie and Mickey” poem writing contest. I extremely enjoyed reading your awesome poem/story. Thank you so much! Love/hugs, Leonora
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Date: 2/3/2013 6:17:00 AM
I noticed there is a contest and this reads like a winner..Good luck in the contest...Thanks for stopping by..Nightmares are no fun..Sara
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Date: 2/3/2013 4:12:00 AM
So funny and lovely!
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Date: 1/30/2013 12:22:00 PM
LOL, what a fun and playful piece, Joe : )
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Date: 1/29/2013 5:56:00 PM
Ah Joe, what a fascinating tale and the rhyme meanders through it like a piece of music. A verse to captive a child of any age and I am no exception and will keep it as a jewel in my faves. Love, Lizzy
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Date: 1/29/2013 1:17:00 PM
wonderful poetry,, holds one's attention to the very end...enjoyed this Joe...
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Date: 1/28/2013 3:18:00 PM
We have several cats in the house, but no Winnie, thus not a single mouse. Love this kid stuff, Joe. Love, daver
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Date: 1/19/2013 4:37:00 PM
Loved the story ,,,,, very nice . have a great day Joe ;}
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Date: 1/11/2013 11:51:00 AM
This is a delightful tale of Winnie and Mickey !! Enjoyed the read very much !! Very creative !!
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Date: 1/11/2013 8:02:00 AM
Joe, how you been doing? I have been out of the loop for a bit. Absolutely enjoyed this write of yours, great to read something from you again. Have a great weekend :)
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Date: 1/10/2013 4:20:00 AM
Joe, I like a lot, holds the reader till the end...David
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Date: 1/9/2013 10:35:00 PM
Nice little write. I had to check this one out because I submitted a poem with the same title a little while ago. Yours is longer and naturally more descriptive than mine.
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Date: 1/9/2013 2:47:00 PM
Ahhh!! A new Winnie The Pooh story in poetic form...Enjoyed reading this afternoon..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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