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Mountaintop Lake

My dreary life shunned, a chance to escape; atop glacial peak, glorious vision. Oasis amongst the frigid landscape; found sanctuary, almost Elysian. Colorful fish dart, despite intrusion, in clear blue water of idyllic lake. Grand oaks' enclosure heightens seclusion, if this be a dream, no wish to awake. Surmount gnarly trunk, in bosom I nest, relax for a spell, savour treetop view. Ponder existence, I truly am blessed; alas, paradise, soon time to eschew. 'fore starting descent, 'fore limbs are unfurled, shut eyes and breathe deep, absorb nature's sounds. This close to Heaven, at top of the world, touch of Creator supremely resounds. ------------------------------------------------ (C) 12th May 2017 ABAB-CDCD-EFEF-GHGH rhyme scheme 10 syllables per line (howmanysyllables.com - but had to remove apostrophes in fourth stanza as it was mis-counting) For Brenda Chiri's Mountaintop Lake contest. (3rd Place) Used the following word(s): #1 treetop view #2 colorful fish #3 clear blue water #4 nature's sounds / sounds of nature

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Date: 8/1/2017 12:04:00 PM
Beautifully composed, I especially loved the last stanza my friend.. A fav..
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John Michaels
Date: 8/1/2017 12:26:00 PM
Thank you for your wonderful comments, Robert. They mean a lot coming from you. All the best, John.
Date: 6/13/2017 5:06:00 PM
Wonderfully composed John. Congratulations on your high placement! : )
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John Michaels
Date: 6/14/2017 1:52:00 AM
Thanks so much, Connie. Really enjoyed writing this one, so delighted with my placement. Kind regards, John.
Date: 6/12/2017 7:41:00 PM
Well done,John, you've captured the perfect scene....congratulations on your win ~*
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John Michaels
Date: 6/14/2017 1:55:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Eve. All the best, John.
Date: 6/12/2017 7:41:00 PM
Well done,John, you've captured the perfect scene....congratulations on your win ~*
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Date: 6/5/2017 11:08:00 AM
This is beautiful, John. The picture you painted appeals to all our senses. I am sure it will also appeal to judge Brenda:) Regards // paul
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John Michaels
Date: 6/5/2017 2:08:00 PM
Thanks so much, Paul. Really glad you liked it! All the best, John.
Date: 5/26/2017 2:49:00 PM
This lovely piece urges me to getaway to such a wonderful retreat, to commune with nature at its best! Thanks, John for sharing this excellent piece with us! Good luck in the contest. Best regards. Pandita
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John Michaels
Date: 5/29/2017 6:36:00 AM
Thank you for your kind and supportive comments as ever, Pandita. All the best, John.
Date: 5/12/2017 7:40:00 AM
Yes, mountains are a great escape, John, and I know the feeling of being close to heaven. Good luck in the contest.
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John Michaels
Date: 5/12/2017 8:02:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Agnes. All the best, John.

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