Mortal Trajectory

Wretched humanity passing through a space
Chosen to be born Chosen to be mournful
Woven webs with wisps of waste
Here to discover from the arms of a mother
So misplaced
Some mortal soul striving to succeed 
Planted firmly willful pouring greed 
Purposeful need wrapped up in treasure 
Blatant inadvertence of mans frailty lost in forever 
So few, so few see beyond their acuity 
Not yet achieved fluent ingenuity 
So they sail into a distant blankness of commutativity

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 2/15/2009 3:36:00 PM
An interesting discourse on humanity, one for the favorites list, as it requires a deeper study. Very Professionally done, Laura. Perhaps an essay, in the near future, eh; That would be a worthwhile read I think! poet butterfly
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Date: 2/15/2009 12:16:00 AM
Smile~"Helli Gifted & Precious Laura Mckenzie!!!"~This was a very deep and searching write dear lady!!!~For some reason it made me think of lost puppets upon strings!? And your message seemed very clear, along with your fluency throughout!!! Hope You had a very wonderful Valentines Day Laura~My Love To You Always, John!:)
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Date: 2/14/2009 11:55:00 PM
As the comments below mention Laura..a thought-filled piece indeed.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 2/14/2009 4:09:00 PM
Wow..this one is deep with meaning, Laura! ...striving to succeed...so misplaced...a complex, poem! ~ Thought provoking ! Carrie
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Date: 2/14/2009 2:40:00 PM
Great work Laura, nice ending. Happy Valentine's Day...Raul
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Date: 2/14/2009 2:15:00 PM
great write. very well penned "Woven webs with wisps of waste" great
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