More Black Than White

more black than white-
old dirty snow
in the gutters....
everything I cannot say
to my dying father

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Skat A

Date: 1/4/2016 12:23:00 PM

WHAT EVER HAPPEN TO YOU... are you someone' on this site. You write like my friend Peter, I mean Chris. Wait Chris is the person who brought you on here. I hope you are well. SKAT

De R

Date: 11/6/2010 11:09:00 AM

This is very sad:( I like the way you compared the dirty snow with the fact that you can not talk to your father anymore. Great tanka! Emilia

Audrey Haick

Date: 11/5/2010 4:59:00 PM

I know we all have different beliefs, Phong..but whatever that wasn't said can be said today..they are never far away from us anyway..just out of our view. Thank you for reading my Haiku..I had to revise it though lol. I'll come visit again. ...Audrey

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 11/5/2010 2:54:00 PM

& Phong-- boohoo-- so you were only kidding after all? oh boohoohoo, what a letdown... :(( ---read your collab with Chris btw, I think it's really good (like I said over there, I actually don't know who wrote which part) so I think that's really good since it maintains that continuity & flow-- way to go for you for trying to venture into free verse :) -- happy that you were able to convince Chris to post it--nikko :)

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/4/2010 9:50:00 AM

sad...one wonders why? since the person will be gone and their will be no reprecussions? The only conclusion can be you wished to punhish yourself? LighT & Love

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 11/3/2010 9:41:00 AM

hi again Phong :) replied back to soupmail and thanks for your comments, I guess we are all weird in our own right, lol :)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 11/1/2010 7:30:00 PM

ah the things left unsaid definitely are the hardest to deal with-- how I know the feeling --thought provoking write, really like how you compare it to snow, Phong... nikko :)

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