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11/7/2024 for Moonstone or Stardust Poetry Contest sponsored by Ink Empress

Moonstone on a chain, as I follow my gaze into your soundless, opaque world, I stroll about, peering through your milky mist, striving to comprehend. Inside your small body, the landscape is timeless and immense, which makes sense, given the beguiling round orb that is your namesake. You were here long before I, or even mankind, existed, and you will be here long after, and, as the moon rules over the night, the heart's domain, you grace the breast of one that organ beats within. So, eternal one, don't you have some wisdom to impart? The woman whose exquisite neck you adorn is also like Luna, as she waxes and wanes, and disappears, only to appear again. Silent gemstone that you are, I long in vain to hear you speak to me or sing your melody, so, that I might finally fathom your depths, as if then I'll understand her, and know what, perhaps I was never meant to know, and which I must now, no longer a fervent youth, accept. She will never be mine, but I will always love her.

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Date: 11/20/2024 11:21:00 AM
Beautifully said, David - the desire to slip inside the moonstone and let it sing and speak to you as you let go of a lover's dream! So pensive! Love the words "milky mist." Perfect! Congratulations on your win!
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David Crandall
Date: 11/20/2024 5:15:00 PM
Thank you, Sam, for your very kind words!
Date: 11/13/2024 11:58:00 AM
- A pleasure to read your winning poem, congratulations David :) - hugs
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David Crandall
Date: 11/13/2024 3:09:00 PM
Thanks Anne-Lise, glad you liked it!
Date: 11/13/2024 7:26:00 AM
Dear david, personally this is one of my faves, i really truly love the ending especially, this was a very difficult contest to judge, if it was just my opinion, i would say youv nailed it! Especially that ending made me feel so much, i can feel the emotions there, and the way youv interpreted the prompt and used it is in a very different manner! Love also your seamless flow! What I absolutely love about this is the passionate touch of love, that is so timeless, thank you for sharing this one! That ending is everything! A fave it is! Congratulations on your win
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David Crandall
Date: 11/13/2024 10:30:00 AM
hi Ink Empress! I'm flattered by your comments, and also more than thrilled to appear as high as I did on this contest!
Date: 11/9/2024 2:11:00 PM
This one reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. Very descriptive about the gem. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
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David Crandall
Date: 11/9/2024 2:45:00 PM
Thank you Sara!
Date: 11/7/2024 5:21:00 PM
Moonstones are magical like your poem. I enjoyed the comparison to a bewitching woman. Your talent continues.
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David Crandall
Date: 11/7/2024 6:07:00 PM
Thanks the compliment Hilda!
Date: 11/7/2024 2:17:00 PM
That’s so lovely David, though she will never be yours the memories are yours to treasure forever… Beryl
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David Crandall
Date: 11/7/2024 2:42:00 PM
Yes, that's true Beryl! Thanks!

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