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Moon Lost Its Balance

We sat aloft an isle dune peering over the ocean, waves mesmerizing our inner turmoil, grainy surf's implosions pulverized ego's scope, whilst voices turned hazy wiping out equilibrium midst broiling sun's psyche washed back with salt water tears, there was no lighthouse to guide a safe harbor nor save disparate crests no words reverberated sound, just the floundering of restlessly gritty emotions that once were blissed horizons before moon lost its balance to relentless torrential currents of neglectful destruction, drowning in ambiguous undertows

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 10/13/2016 2:58:00 PM
"Foundering" works too. - To sink, go to the bottom, be lost at sea. - "the ship foundered"
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Paloma P
Date: 10/13/2016 3:18:00 PM
These are emotions, I think floundered works better. Thanks for the suggestion though.
Date: 10/10/2016 6:57:00 PM
This is very deep and intense, and I love the way the lines look like waves to add visual context, thanks for writing this!:)... I really get this.
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Paloma P
Date: 10/10/2016 7:11:00 PM
Thanks so much Chris, I wasn't sure I was going to be able to carry the theme through, but I see you got the intended sentiment. :)

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