Mood Setter

I awoke this morning groggy,
breath a little tart.
To my left a young beauty,
what a great start.

I step off my bed,
slip sandals on my feet.
to the bathroom I head,
to wash my face and brush my teeth.

I opened the door
to a pleasant surprise.
there she stood gleaming,
with a look of passion in her eyes.

I pulled her close,
until we were face to face.
My hands tickle her lower back,
above her crack,
we're immersed in loves embrace..

This picture perfect moment 
seemed infinite.
Like we were swimming with the stars,
playing with the constellations,
a lovers picnic on Mars.

Jared Pickett
2/9/2010
Asavvy1
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 3/6/2010 12:26:00 PM
So romantic. Susan
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Date: 2/25/2010 9:52:00 AM
hmmm, obviously ur sparkle with your love is much more fascinating these days then mine, I'm afraid I could have been a bit brash in my first work here.... oh well, so long for now, LM
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Date: 2/25/2010 4:39:00 AM
A moment caught so well with words, great write, ~John~
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Date: 2/16/2010 7:39:00 AM
Are they "haters" those who can not stand "our" honesty? Or is it that we "the truthsayers..our owns truthes is all we speak" should strive for more tact. HUgs Light & Love
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Date: 2/11/2010 4:10:00 PM
Emmmmm Hot poem...VERY enjoyable....Marty
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Date: 2/10/2010 7:23:00 AM
You captured a very sweet moment with this one. A delightful read. Thanks for commenting on my sonnet. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 2/9/2010 6:59:00 PM
Excellent..............reminds me of a Chagal painting!
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Date: 2/9/2010 6:18:00 PM
Cupid's little arrows are flying all over the place..nice light hearted write.. huh?? is this U??? FYI.. Ron has been in my life for the past 20 years.. on and off ... so he's a good source for inspiration for poetry writes about luv and loss.. he's a classic example.. I worked with him as his secty. for those 20 years.. classic boss/secty. duo.. imagine that?? .. the depressing poem is for the contest.. it took a lot of thought to compose something so sad and down.. but its the challenge ignite
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Date: 2/9/2010 11:46:00 AM
Jared,you ve got talent,I love this poem,especially the last paragraph..excellent..Charma
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