Monologue of a Star

Alone. Terribly, unfathomably alone. 
Silently, within the void I churn. 
Brilliantly, in hopes to be made known
I'll condemn all that I am to burn. 

Reaching. Into the void my warmth is reaching. 
My aura pulsing, pleading to be seen
Over the walls of distance breaching
Despite the time and space that lies between. 

Empty. A bitter, heavy, crushing empty. 
Collapsing, I descend into a hole
Until not even light itself may leave me,
And time and space are under my control. 

7.7.20
For Nina Parmenter's You are a Star Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 7/11/2020 10:37:00 PM
Jesse, this is really good. So effective the way you use cadence to create a mood from the first line: "Alone, terribly ... alone." And then "...Until not even light itself may leave me..." ~Eric
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Date: 7/10/2020 10:39:00 AM
Oh what a lovely reading this would make! Congratulations, Jesse!
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Date: 7/9/2020 7:48:00 PM
A clever personification of the collapsing star becoming a black hole. Well done - congrats on your win ~ John
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Date: 7/9/2020 1:23:00 AM
Your monologue is intriguing Jesse. A lot to comprehened from the lonely yet powerful star that's gloomy yet giving light to the world awaiting an end that might lead to a beginning. Congratulations on your win! :)
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Date: 7/8/2020 10:43:00 PM
I love how you penned this...the star sad and alone, reaching to be seen. Wonderful insight Jesse, congrats on your placement
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Date: 7/8/2020 10:17:00 PM
Hey, nice piece of introspectral-splosion for Nina's contest, Jesse. Nice to see your avatar on the winner's list! Cheers, Gershon
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Date: 7/8/2020 6:00:00 PM
*~Back with congratulations! ~*
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Date: 7/7/2020 12:24:00 PM
Fantastic! I especially love how you ended it. My best to you in the contest Jesse. ~Maureen
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Date: 7/7/2020 8:34:00 AM
Great personification...
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