Mommie

He hurts me, mommie Can you help me Set me free From this pain Where I don't wanna be Let me fly with the angels Drift on clouds past the moon I love you mommie But I don't want to stay And live in this pain every day He hurts me, mommie Can you help me Help me, pass away 6 pm Jan 4, 2013, Friday

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Bl Devnath

Date: 2/13/2013 3:52:00 PM

A pain not of body but of soul complaining mommie how to become set free. It's philosophical too. Wonderfully done. Loved always, bl

Debbie Duncan
Date: 2/15/2013 2:32:00 PM

Thank you for reading bl ;}

The Situation

Date: 1/28/2013 9:37:00 PM

If I were mommies then i'd say; don't let love treat you this way.make demands. Don't be afraid to display.men love love emotionaly displayed. Bring him in line he'll understand. If he loves you he'll abide.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/19/2013 5:17:00 AM

Very emotive and expressive work..This should never happen to a child..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 1/17/2013 5:21:00 PM

Tears flowed, emotions conveyed. I hope this isn't a personal experience. Bless you from the bottom of my hart Deb. Friends Always, Connie

Daver Austin

Date: 1/16/2013 12:05:00 PM

I sometimes wonder - could this also come from the womb? Good stuff. Thanks for reading my stuff. daver

Don Johnson

Date: 1/12/2013 4:56:00 PM

great words here babe...and it strikes a chord...in the heart.. rain forests to the north of Australia are being destroyed ....in New Guinea where it used to rain feet a year, Malaya, Borneo and all of Indonesia were well timbered....billions of trees gone for greed...mans insatiable greed... the acursed monkee walks and destroys..... queer weather here no drought last 4 years , climate change??? or the death of billions of tree souls....

Debbie Duncan
Date: 1/19/2013 6:34:00 PM

Thank ya Don ;}

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 1/11/2013 7:12:00 AM

The people who plea for this every day are counted in myriads! A tragedy disguised in blessing is seen, because of the writing, here. Wonderful writing!

Robert Johnson

Date: 1/7/2013 12:41:00 PM

Obscurely, the child suffers so. It's asking just to be let go. Mommie, it hurts more each day. Too much that I just can't stay. I love you mommie, I love you true. But I just don't know what I can do. May this just be a poem Debbie. Personally that is. But sadly, this reality lives with young and old alike. May God's grace be with you always. <3 :)

Vesna Kovrlija

Date: 1/7/2013 12:00:00 AM

It so sad and touching. And it is beautiful.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 1/7/2013 2:54:00 AM

Thank you Vesna ;}

Jacob Cra

Date: 1/6/2013 5:34:00 PM

wow... ur great. Is this published or what? It's really good, and you are extremely talented... I've read some of your other poems as well. You should visit my site: poeticpossibilities.tk ! I think this poem could have a really good chance of winning one of our contests! Or enter another one of your poems... they all seem really fantastic and creative! Wish you the best with your poetry no matter what you decide!

Debbie Duncan
Date: 1/6/2013 9:07:00 PM

Thank you Jacob ;}

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/6/2013 3:37:00 PM

this seems so tragic, as if it is a small child that has been kidnapped by a child abuser? It would be awful to have this happen to one of your kids.