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There I go…watching a young girl across my garden, her body language exposing both pleasure and piety— soil roots tended with naturalness amidst soft gust… Like so, she mirrors this eleven-year- old within, curious though kind with an appetite for daring the unknown: But I’m not prepared to replay this game— I mean, a comeback of my innocence when nights barrage a mind with past transgressions still in need of hubris’ final release …totally unforgiving, an inner critic seethes from unresolved anger. This jovial angel is not me. My pissed off womanhood soaks in an outpour where catharsis escapes me, unless I embrace battles won lost humbly : I am not there yet. O that little girl by the garden and my eleven-year old self vanish that I am left alone to bear new flowers , their tender plea…my choice. --------- 5/03/2019 A John lawless Contest: The Crap Shoot Poetry

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Date: 5/12/2019 9:36:00 AM
"I am not there yet"...the trials of coming to peace within ourselves...so beautifully expressed. thanks for entering the contest
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Date: 5/11/2019 5:04:00 PM
Great poem, Nette:-) Enjoyed this. Congrats on your win!
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Date: 5/11/2019 4:33:00 PM
I enjoyed this celebration of innocence. Congrats on your win Nette. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 5/11/2019 4:30:00 PM
CONGRATUATIONS on your well-deserved win, Nette! Janice
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Date: 5/11/2019 3:03:00 PM
Wow. One of those poems that "send you". Excellent ink Nette, congratulations for your win! xomo <3
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Date: 5/4/2019 5:33:00 AM
That little girl has not abandoned you. She is waiting for your permission to dance across the lawn and hug you . You got a way with words that only you own Nette. Have a wonderful day my friend xo
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Date: 5/4/2019 4:04:00 AM
Thank you for reminding me that my inner toddler needs nourishing. This is up on the shelves!
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Date: 5/4/2019 3:46:00 AM
Nette, this went to my FAV list before I could finish reading it. Wow! So beautiful! So gloriously accurate. You have captured all of us in this swell swoop!
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Date: 5/4/2019 3:01:00 AM
How we all look back sometimes at our innocent youth. But as we get older we see things in a different light. Good luck Nette. Tom
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Date: 5/4/2019 2:36:00 AM
Nette - a mirror reflecting and inducing a mindful conversation - your imagination soars in this poem and the imagery is awesome Nette, Certainly best a win! Hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 5/3/2019 10:05:00 PM
I was captivated by the deep thoughtful beauty of your poem, Nette. You pen flows gold. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan
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Date: 5/3/2019 5:16:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this reflective poem..and the dialogue of the two in the mirror..imaginative..creative.
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Date: 5/3/2019 3:55:00 PM
- Yes, it's always our own choice Nette - A great picture "in the mirror" - Best wishes in the contest :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/3/2019 3:42:00 PM
This impeccable poem is a reminder of the innocence that resides in a child's eyes, and how we grow up to start perceiving things differently.
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Date: 5/3/2019 3:00:00 PM
Beautifully expressed Nette. Best of luck in the contest. : ) xxoo
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