Nette Onclaud Poet Lyric

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Mirror of Two Girls

There I go…watching a young girl across my garden,
her body language exposing both pleasure  and piety—
soil   roots tended  with naturalness amidst soft gust…

Like so, she mirrors this eleven-year- old within, 
curious though kind  with  an appetite for  daring 
the unknown:   But I’m not prepared to replay this game—
I mean, a comeback of my innocence when  nights
barrage a mind with past transgressions still in need
of hubris’ final release …totally unforgiving,  
an inner critic seethes from unresolved anger.

This jovial angel is not me.

My  pissed off womanhood soaks in an outpour
where catharsis  escapes  me,
unless I embrace battles won   lost humbly :

I am not there yet.

O that little girl by the garden and my  eleven-year
old self  vanish    that I am left alone
to bear new flowers ,   their tender  plea…my choice.


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5/03/2019
A John lawless Contest: The Crap Shoot Poetry

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John Lawless May 12, 2019 at 9:36 AM "I am not there yet"...the trials of coming to peace within ourselves...so beautifully expressed. thanks for entering the contest

Edward Ibeh May 11, 2019 at 5:04 PM Great poem, Nette:-) Enjoyed this. Congrats on your win!

Richard Lamoureux May 11, 2019 at 4:33 PM I enjoyed this celebration of innocence. Congrats on your win Nette. Hugs Rick.

Janice Canerdy May 11, 2019 at 4:30 PM CONGRATUATIONS on your well-deserved win, Nette! Janice

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 11, 2019 at 3:03 PM Wow. One of those poems that "send you". Excellent ink Nette, congratulations for your win! xomo <3

Mystic Rose Rose May 4, 2019 at 5:33 AM That little girl has not abandoned you. She is waiting for your permission to dance across the lawn and hug you . You got a way with words that only you own Nette. Have a wonderful day my friend xo

Ashley Conte May 4, 2019 at 4:04 AM Thank you for reminding me that my inner toddler needs nourishing. This is up on the shelves!

Caren Krutsinger May 4, 2019 at 3:46 AM Nette, this went to my FAV list before I could finish reading it. Wow! So beautiful! So gloriously accurate. You have captured all of us in this swell swoop!

Tom Cunningham May 4, 2019 at 3:01 AM How we all look back sometimes at our innocent youth. But as we get older we see things in a different light. Good luck Nette. Tom

Jennifer Proxenos May 4, 2019 at 2:36 AM Nette - a mirror reflecting and inducing a mindful conversation - your imagination soars in this poem and the imagery is awesome Nette, Certainly best a win! Hugs, Jennifer.

Susan Ashley May 3, 2019 at 10:05 PM I was captivated by the deep thoughtful beauty of your poem, Nette. You pen flows gold. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit May 3, 2019 at 5:16 PM I enjoyed reading this reflective poem..and the dialogue of the two in the mirror..imaginative..creative.

Anne-Lise Andresen May 3, 2019 at 3:55 PM - Yes, it's always our own choice Nette - A great picture "in the mirror" - Best wishes in the contest :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Norma Arana May 3, 2019 at 3:42 PM This impeccable poem is a reminder of the innocence that resides in a child's eyes, and how we grow up to start perceiving things differently.

Connie Marcum Wong May 3, 2019 at 3:00 PM Beautifully expressed Nette. Best of luck in the contest. : ) xxoo