Mindful of Solar Eclipse

MINDFUL OF SOLAR ECLIPSE
He’s coming with his dark glasses
and dizzying smile
He’s stopping by for a minute or two
a minuet of manic joy
He covers the sun with his steady hand
she tingles with trepidation
Will she be blotted out from his employ
she wipes off sweat as he passes by
Merely a warning of end times
dark days of deepened sin
We watch with amusement
arm in arm on love boats
Standing in main line parks
finding the perfect spot
Would we find the perfect standing of our heart
a bond with the patient perfect God
When the cross covered the earth in darkness
men of old took note
When the stone rolled away from the sun
the eclipse was eradicated
Emblematic pain or joy of your soul
gaze up with future foretold
8/21/2017 An unrhymed couplet Strand’s Standard Contest NO 30 1st Place
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Brewer Avatar
September 12, 2017 at 4:47 PM
A potpourri of associated images that are powerful and evocative. I find this poem, as with many others of yours, mystifying, but intriguing, and always impressive.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 12, 2017 at 11:47 PM
Thanks so much, Geoffrey!
Shaw Avatar
August 29, 2017 at 1:24 PM
Hi Kim, I loved your poem. The Eclipse certainly inspires people. What makes it even more incredible is the unlikely alignment that creates this magical event. Your words and imagery is wonderful, I don't hear Metaphor only beauty, Kind regards, Kevin x
Rodrigues Avatar
August 29, 2017 at 7:49 PM
Thank you, Kevin!
Hoffman Avatar
August 25, 2017 at 7:59 AM
Very well written and prophetic eclipse poem Kim!~Che :)
Rodrigues Avatar
August 25, 2017 at 8:58 AM
Thank you, Cheryl!
Medders Tobechi Avatar
August 24, 2017 at 6:59 PM
Wow Kim, this says a lot. The metaphors are magic. Its a FAVE for me.
Rodrigues Avatar
August 24, 2017 at 7:00 PM
Thanks so much, Janis!
Wood Avatar
August 23, 2017 at 1:38 PM
"When the stone rolled away from the sun . . . " I had never thought of it that way. Very insightful Kim. Loved this poem!
May Avatar
August 23, 2017 at 12:03 PM
Very nicely done Kim...Congrats on your win
Rodrigues Avatar
August 23, 2017 at 1:03 PM
Thanks, Joseph!
Salehi Avatar
August 23, 2017 at 12:57 AM
Just beautiful my friend...just beautiful...
Rodrigues Avatar
August 23, 2017 at 7:02 AM
Thanks so much, Pashang <3 Kim
Sinha-Roy Avatar
August 22, 2017 at 11:28 PM
Congratulations, Kim for the win. Very nice couplet. I liked the expression " the stone rolled away from the sun".
Rodrigues Avatar
August 23, 2017 at 7:02 AM
Thank you, Subimal! <3
Dietrich Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 5:46 PM
wow, Kim, what a great metaphor you made of it!! Excellent work.
Rodrigues Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 7:37 PM
Thank you, Andrea!
Pandit Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 10:31 AM
Very well said, Kim--a timely poem well articulated!
Rodrigues Avatar
August 21, 2017 at 11:02 AM
Thanks, Vijay! <3 Kim
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