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Midnight Sky

scintillating stars
punctuating velvet skies
owl swoops on its prey

Vernal 2017 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Brian Strand

03~26~17

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Paul Callus

April 1, 2017 at 9:12 AM

'Tis a most worthy winning entry, Jan. I love the turn on the 3rd line. Congratulations...hugs :) paul

Jan Allison

April 6, 2017 at 3:18 PM

Thanks Paul I do find these haiku difficult and never know if I've written a proper one:-) hugs jan xx

Anisha Dutta

April 1, 2017 at 12:22 AM

Congrats JAN to win. I am charmed. Hugs

Jan Allison

April 6, 2017 at 3:17 PM

Thanks Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

March 31, 2017 at 9:25 PM

Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison

April 6, 2017 at 3:17 PM

Thanks Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie

March 30, 2017 at 1:08 AM

You have such a lovely poetic soul Jan :-) This is so beautiful and the last line makes the imagery all the more striking. I love this, fave, 7+ Sublime writing. lynnxxx

Jan Allison

March 30, 2017 at 12:08 PM

aww thanks Lynn I think I surprise people with my more serious writes - I surprise myself lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

March 29, 2017 at 10:20 AM

Hi Jan, i had to come in to this piece first. I do love the Haiku form. An excellent Haiku Jan, this has to go into my Haiku faves. Wonderful words to express your vision. Great image. This has to be a seven. Hugs....Mike. XX

Jan Allison

March 29, 2017 at 11:07 AM

Thanks so much Mike :-) I never am sureif I have written a proper haiku but from the comments I've had I think this one is ok:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

March 28, 2017 at 8:01 PM

Beautiful! (I have to catch up on all the poems you wrote while I was unable to visit here)

Jan Allison

March 28, 2017 at 8:03 PM

Thanks for all your support Agnes, I too have a lot of catching up to do:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

March 27, 2017 at 11:58 AM

ohh, so vividly expressed, jan.. SOUPIE FOR YOU!..huggs

Jan Allison

March 27, 2017 at 12:01 PM

Thanks Nette:-) I've just seen it and replied:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

March 27, 2017 at 10:09 AM

The last line is sure a great turn to the first two beautiful lines:)

Jan Allison

March 27, 2017 at 10:14 AM

Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green

March 27, 2017 at 7:13 AM

This was beautiful Jan. Soft and wondrous the scene you have created with your words.

Jan Allison

March 27, 2017 at 7:14 AM

Thanks Chris:-) hugs Jan xx

Tatianna Leachet

March 27, 2017 at 6:58 AM

This was very beautiful and well enjoyed :)

Jan Allison

March 27, 2017 at 7:08 AM

Thanks Tatianna:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

March 26, 2017 at 10:10 PM

Great contrast between the beauty of the starlit velvet sky and the killing of prey. Sweet write, Jan.

Jan Allison

March 27, 2017 at 3:04 AM

Thanks Lin:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

March 26, 2017 at 6:26 PM

Beautiful haiku Jan...hugs

Jan Allison

March 26, 2017 at 6:27 PM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

March 26, 2017 at 5:48 PM

WoW! Jan, these three lines are amazing. The imagery is on point. I wish you the best of luck in contest:-) Alexis

Jan Allison

March 26, 2017 at 5:50 PM

Thanks Alexis I was inspired by the clear skies the past 2 nights:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

March 26, 2017 at 5:09 PM

Wow Jan this is fabulous.

Jan Allison

March 26, 2017 at 5:16 PM

aww thanks Tim I hope Brian likes it - we have had incredibly clear nights for 2 nights and ground frost the next day - absolutely beautiful when we go on our midnight walks:-) the only thing that was missing was the owl so that is poetic licence lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

March 26, 2017 at 4:38 PM

I think this is a beauty, Jan. HOpe you win. It's such a crap shoot for me with these contests. I had like eight haiku I was going back and forth on. I probably chose wrongly.

Jan Allison

March 26, 2017 at 4:47 PM

Thanks Andrea I hope Brian likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

March 26, 2017 at 4:26 PM

very lovely, jan!

Jan Allison

March 26, 2017 at 4:30 PM

Thanks Ilene:-)For the last two nights there have been incredibly clear skies and its been lovely to go out late and walk and see the stars:-) hugs Jan xx