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scintillating stars punctuating velvet skies owl swoops on its prey Vernal 2017 Poetry Contest Sponsored by Brian Strand 03~26~17

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Paul Callus

Date: 4/1/2017 9:12:00 AM

'Tis a most worthy winning entry, Jan. I love the turn on the 3rd line. Congratulations...hugs :) paul

Jan Allison
Date: 4/6/2017 3:18:00 PM

Thanks Paul I do find these haiku difficult and never know if I've written a proper one:-) hugs jan xx

Anisha Dutta

Date: 4/1/2017 12:22:00 AM

Congrats JAN to win. I am charmed. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 4/6/2017 3:17:00 PM

Thanks Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 3/31/2017 9:25:00 PM

Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 4/6/2017 3:17:00 PM

Thanks Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie

Date: 3/30/2017 1:08:00 AM

You have such a lovely poetic soul Jan :-) This is so beautiful and the last line makes the imagery all the more striking. I love this, fave, 7+ Sublime writing. lynnxxx

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2017 12:08:00 PM

aww thanks Lynn I think I surprise people with my more serious writes - I surprise myself lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/29/2017 10:20:00 AM

Hi Jan, i had to come in to this piece first. I do love the Haiku form. An excellent Haiku Jan, this has to go into my Haiku faves. Wonderful words to express your vision. Great image. This has to be a seven. Hugs....Mike. XX

Jan Allison
Date: 3/29/2017 11:07:00 AM

Thanks so much Mike :-) I never am sureif I have written a proper haiku but from the comments I've had I think this one is ok:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 3/28/2017 8:01:00 PM

Beautiful! (I have to catch up on all the poems you wrote while I was unable to visit here)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/28/2017 8:03:00 PM

Thanks for all your support Agnes, I too have a lot of catching up to do:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/27/2017 11:58:00 AM

ohh, so vividly expressed, jan.. SOUPIE FOR YOU!..huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2017 12:01:00 PM

Thanks Nette:-) I've just seen it and replied:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/27/2017 10:09:00 AM

The last line is sure a great turn to the first two beautiful lines:)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2017 10:14:00 AM

Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 3/27/2017 7:13:00 AM

This was beautiful Jan. Soft and wondrous the scene you have created with your words.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2017 7:14:00 AM

Thanks Chris:-) hugs Jan xx

Tatianna Leachet

Date: 3/27/2017 6:58:00 AM

This was very beautiful and well enjoyed :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2017 7:08:00 AM

Thanks Tatianna:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 3/26/2017 10:10:00 PM

Great contrast between the beauty of the starlit velvet sky and the killing of prey. Sweet write, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2017 3:04:00 AM

Thanks Lin:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 3/26/2017 6:26:00 PM

Beautiful haiku Jan...hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2017 6:27:00 PM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 3/26/2017 5:48:00 PM

WoW! Jan, these three lines are amazing. The imagery is on point. I wish you the best of luck in contest:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2017 5:50:00 PM

Thanks Alexis I was inspired by the clear skies the past 2 nights:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 3/26/2017 5:09:00 PM

Wow Jan this is fabulous.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2017 5:16:00 PM

aww thanks Tim I hope Brian likes it - we have had incredibly clear nights for 2 nights and ground frost the next day - absolutely beautiful when we go on our midnight walks:-) the only thing that was missing was the owl so that is poetic licence lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/26/2017 4:38:00 PM

I think this is a beauty, Jan. HOpe you win. It's such a crap shoot for me with these contests. I had like eight haiku I was going back and forth on. I probably chose wrongly.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2017 4:47:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I hope Brian likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/26/2017 4:26:00 PM

very lovely, jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2017 4:30:00 PM

Thanks Ilene:-)For the last two nights there have been incredibly clear skies and its been lovely to go out late and walk and see the stars:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/26/2017 3:28:00 PM

- A beautiful picture, Jan - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2017 3:42:00 PM

Thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/26/2017 2:58:00 PM

Nice

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2017 3:07:00 PM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx