Message In the Bottle

______
                                        \           /
                                     my thoughts
                                     have reached
                                     your heart, li-
                                     ke a solo star
                                     that's wishe-
                                     d on for mira-
                                     cles. I pray y-
                                     our well my lo-
                                   ve, yet guarded wit-
                                hin my mind,  my soul is
                              close. Like a star that gleam
                             in a flash we share the  same 
                            desires, though miles apart, so
                            now our bliss  souls rest oceans                          away, our
                            fine love still shinning-----When                    my message
                            finds you at the shore line, I pr-               ay you
                            read it in time, I admire you an-                       d adorn 
                            you with my joyful tears. The da-           y nice 
                            to us, possibly this note will find                       you
                            walking bare feet along the shor -    eline sand
                            a wine bottle among your feet un-                      expected
                            your soul will find me-----through              light
                            years. I pray you place your love inside this
   blissful star,         return to the water, 
and I will     hope one day soon,
i get to hold you                     near~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
my soul ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
             my gracious love~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ 
   one day~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 4/6/2017 3:07:00 PM
A worthy message, Trice. : )
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Patrice Trice Jackson
Date: 5/25/2017 5:33:00 PM
Thank you Doug I'm glad you enjoyed my poem
Date: 1/14/2017 11:14:00 AM
What a great concrete poem. Wonderful!
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Patrice Trice Jackson
Date: 1/14/2017 12:25:00 PM
Thank you Dane... I'm glad you enjoyed my poem... God bless
Date: 1/6/2017 5:14:00 PM
This is very creative and well written. I love the bottle and the poem as a whole, it all goes together nicely.
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Patrice Trice Jackson
Date: 1/10/2017 6:32:00 PM
Thank you Tatiana God bless you... I'm glad you enjoyed my poems...
Date: 12/29/2016 12:48:00 AM
I like this bottle. Visual clarity and content, I like this, Kai
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Patrice Trice Jackson
Date: 12/29/2016 9:21:00 AM
Thank you Kai I'm glad you enjoy my poem god bless
Date: 12/27/2016 6:14:00 AM
Beautiful, Patrice ... a nice poetry ... pearls of thought ... beautifully cultured...
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Patrice Trice Jackson
Date: 12/27/2016 1:25:00 PM
Thank you Probir... I'm glad you enjoyed... God bless
Date: 12/27/2016 2:38:00 AM
Oh! I see creativity screaming aloud. Well crafted, Patrice. A 7.
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Patrice Trice Jackson
Date: 12/27/2016 2:47:00 AM
Thank you Adeniji I'm glad you enjoy my poem
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