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Message In An Acrostic

Today we set sail for the United States of America
I am on the maiden voyage on the most luxurious ship ever built
The first class cabin is absolutely wonderful, 
All the passengers are so excited
New York is going to be absolutely fabulous
It’s the journey of a lifetime
Calm seas are forecast for the entire trip.

Message in an acrostic Contest
Sponsored by Kim Rodrigues

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Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Roper Avatar
September 3, 2021 at 7:53 AM
Very well executed , Jan, nowonder Kim chose it.
Martin Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 11:25 AM
At least this poem didn't hit an iceberg! Congrats on your win Jan! :-)
Allison Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 12:26 PM
Thanks Mark yes my poem could have sunk without a trace but thankfully was on the winners list:-) hugs Jan xx
Medders Tobechi Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 9:57 PM
Congratulations Jan. Write this out in your reply. I've looked a long time but can't get the end. Well done. Very hidden.
Allison Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 12:26 PM
I read many of the contest poems and some messages were so well hidden they must have been cryptic lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Roper Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 9:12 PM
Back to congratulate you, Hugs
Allison Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 12:27 PM
Thanks Eve - not long until we share our special day:-) xx:-) hugs Jan xx
May Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 5:27 PM
Congrats on a great win Jan!
Allison Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 12:27 PM
Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx
Godwin Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 5:16 PM
Excellent job! Man, making out the messages strains my eyes, I wish we had font size choices up in this place! Very clever, Jan. I came to congratulate you thinking I'd already commented on your entry - and I was wrong for the first time all year. (you believe me?) Love, CayCay
Allison Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 12:28 PM
Thanks Caycay I am sure there is a bug as often I know I've commented but the comments have disappeared - a mystery like the titanic sinking:-) hugs Jan xx
Callus Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 4:43 PM
Congratulations on your lovely win, Jan. I like both the theme you chose and the message within. The Titanic went under, but your poem flew high!! Unfortunately my entry was dragged under by the sinking Titanic:) Hugs // paul
Allison Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 12:29 PM
Aww sorry your poem sank to the bottom of the soup bowl - hopefully it will resuface in another contest:-) hugs Jan xx
Murray Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 4:42 PM
Wonderful Jan. Congratulations.
Allison Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 12:29 PM
Thanks Jean:-) hugs Jan xx
Pett Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 4:40 PM
Congratulations Jan, great acrostic and theme.
Allison Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 12:30 PM
Thanks Roy I'm a very happy bunny with my high placement:-) hugs Jan xx
Burch Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 3:23 PM
Congratulations Jan!! Well done!! Love Titanic themes!!;) Big Hugggs. Deb
Allison Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 4:05 PM
Thanks so much Deb:-) hugs Jan xx
Rodrigues Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 3:12 PM
I am such a sucker for everything titanic! Loved the excitement of the voyage and the dire cry for help! The three SOS's! Congrats, Jan Hugs!
Allison Avatar
January 23, 2017 at 1:05 PM
OH HOW AWESOME THAT MUST HAVE BEEN KIM:-) HUGS jAN XX
Rodrigues Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 3:31 PM
Oh, I would Jan! My daughter and I went to the Titanic exhibit that was traveling around. How surreal it was for me to touch the ship I had heard about forever! They were selling titanic coal in necklaces, and I told my daughter there is no way, since I take so many cruises. I don't want the ocean calling me home! LOL
Rodrigues Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 3:30 PM
Oh, I would Jan! My daughter and I went to the Titanic exhibit that was traveling around. How surreal it was for me to touch the ship I had heard about forever! They were selling titanic coal in necklaces, and I told my daughter there is no way, since I take so many cruises. I don't want the ocean calling me home! LOL
Allison Avatar
January 21, 2017 at 3:17 PM
Thanks so much Kim I am absolutely delighted to place so well- we saw a documentary recently and it said that there had been a fire in one of the coal bunkers which caused the bulkheads to buckle and not be watertight:-( If you ever get to Belfast do visit the Titanic exhibition its absolutely fascinating!:-) hugs Jan xx
Sietesantos Avatar
January 19, 2017 at 9:02 PM
This is an amazing piece, Jan! Thank you for showing us how it should be done! I can't even begin to start writing one like this! Excellent! A-7 and I'm sure it will place highly in the contest! Hugs. Pandita
Allison Avatar
January 20, 2017 at 3:28 AM
Thanks Pandita I hope Kim likes it. I enter fewer and fewer contests - if my muse isn't on form then I simply can't force a poem and there are some I wouldn't enter for various reasons:-) hugs jan xx
Roper Avatar
January 18, 2017 at 11:51 PM
I'm with Chris you make it very easy .... I like your poem and arrangement . Good luck in the contest Hugs Eve
Allison Avatar
January 19, 2017 at 11:08 AM
I enjoyed the challenge Eve, we saw a documentary on Titanic where they said about there being a fire in one of the coal bunkers and it caused the bulkheads to buckle and not be watertight:-) hugs jan xx
Green Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 9:33 AM
This was great Jan. I saw this contest and it seemed so hard, but you have made it look easy.
Allison Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 10:14 AM
Thanks Chris I'm really pleased with the way this turned out:-) hugs Jan xx
Daniel Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 8:22 AM
A simple but effective message, Jan:) should place high:)
Allison Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 10:15 AM
I hope Kim likes it:-) hugs Jan xx
Trifiatis Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 7:01 AM
Yes, unfortunately, it was a journey of a lifetime dear, Jan! Excellent Acrostic that pays tribute to those that never completed they trip! A seven! Hugs, xx
Allison Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 10:15 AM
Thanks Demetrios it is still a story that fascinates me - we visited the Titanic museum in Belfast :-) hugs Jan xx
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 5:08 AM
It was anything but calm after the collision. A great and clever entry Jan! Best luck for the contest. : ) 7
Allison Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 10:16 AM
Thanks Connie:-) hugs Jan xx
Y. Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 8:25 PM
Hi Jan, You've penned a well written and clever acrostic. The message within the piece was good. It reads like a winner to me. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-)Alexis
Allison Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 10:16 AM
Thanks Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx
Matt Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 7:54 PM
please let this poem stay and gooluck with the contest! i like it alot !~phatt
Allison Avatar
January 16, 2017 at 10:16 AM
Cheers Phatt:-) hugs Jan xx
Haight Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 6:40 PM
Awesome Acrostic, Jan! Your poem presented the peaceful luxury and the coded message the tragedy! Very clever and sure to be a winner! 7 Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 6:54 PM
Thanks for your vote of confidence Sandra I do hope Kim likes it:-) hugs Jan xx
Bauer Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 5:24 PM
i love this, jan! so very clever!
Allison Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 5:27 PM
Thanks Ilene I was really pleased with the way it turned out:-) If you read my comment to Maurice we recently saw a documentary on the ship so the idea came to me for the poem... we also visited the Titanic museum in Belfast about 5 years ago its absolutely fascinating:-) hugs Jan xx
May Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 5:07 PM
Great acrostic Jan...best wishes
Allison Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 5:09 PM
Thanks Joseph I've seen some excellent poems for the contest:-) hugs jan xx
Rigoler Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 4:53 PM
Completely forgot about this tragic accident. For me, apart from the loss of innocent lives, it tells me that few things man puts his hand and brains to are flawless. A new theory is out that not one but possible two icebergs caused the luxury ships sinking. As for Mr. Trump, he's like a lunatic who's escape from an asylum and gone mad with his new found freedom. Let's hold on to our seats! Thanks Jan. / M
Allison Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 5:03 PM
We saw a documentary recently that explained there was a fire in one coal bunker and this caused the bulkheads to buckle so the seals were not watertight - fascinating to see new theories coming out even after all these years. As for trump heaven help us all:-( hugs jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 4:32 PM
GREAT job, Jan. I like how you do the regular part very calm, and with the calamity part hidden in the text. I have an idea but it's nothing like the way everyone else is doing these, so I hope she will like it. Gotta at least try it. Maybe I won't pull it off.
Allison Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 4:51 PM
Thanks for your lovely comment. Go with your gut instinct for the contest Andrea I've seen some great poems :-) hugs Jan xx
Chircop Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 1:47 PM
You made me live the dream and nightmare to come for the people of the titanic for a moment.Awesome acrostic.
Allison Avatar
January 15, 2017 at 3:59 PM
Thanks Charma I really enjoyed this challenge:-) hugs Jan xx
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