Jay Narain Poet Other

Memories

-------i never dreamed of being a poet - a life event made me one

                                       a rose was a rose
                              before aching heart saw your
                                      beauty & smile in it

                       in the garden - where roses once bloomed
                          a departed love - its beauty consumed
                      now sorrow lingers - like thorns that remain
                        painful reminders of love's sweet refrain

                                               6/1/2023
                a monoku haiku and 4 lines of rhyme poem contest
                                 sponsored by- tania kitchin

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Sotto Poet June 4, 2023 at 3:32 PM The departure of love has the power to transform roses into thorns, my dear Jay. Your exquisite use of language and imagery adds a layer of beauty to your poetry, making it a strong contender for the contest. Best of luck to you. Jay Narain June 6, 2023 at 11:27 AM Thank you

Bill Baker June 3, 2023 at 12:00 PM Departed love can turn roses to thorns, Jay. Nice entry for the contest. Good luck! This is my first visit to your poetry, there will be more. :-) Have a nice weekend! Bill Jay Narain June 6, 2023 at 11:26 AM Thank you

Sand Blown June 2, 2023 at 2:34 PM ...nice poetics....'a rose arose and time became a growth event.....stan Jay Narain June 6, 2023 at 11:28 AM Thanks

Alexis Y. June 2, 2023 at 11:27 AM Hi Jay, This is a good entry for the contest. You executed each form. It had a nice flow and rhythm. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day and weekend-Alexis Jay Narain June 6, 2023 at 11:28 AM Thanks

Unseeking Seeker June 1, 2023 at 9:26 PM A truly magnificent poem, Jay ~ good luck in the contest Jay Narain June 6, 2023 at 11:29 AM Thanks

Andrea Dietrich June 1, 2023 at 1:30 PM This is really beautiful. I do know that Tania likes nature and no emotions shown, which is kind of difficult to do in haiku sometimes. Some haiku writers DO use human emotion as you do. I love this. Jay Narain June 6, 2023 at 11:31 AM Thanks Andrea. I followed your advice, took it out of contest. I have a new one titled :"Tulips".