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-------i never dreamed of being a poet - a life event made me one a rose was a rose before aching heart saw your beauty & smile in it in the garden - where roses once bloomed a departed love - its beauty consumed now sorrow lingers - like thorns that remain painful reminders of love's sweet refrain 6/1/2023 a monoku haiku and 4 lines of rhyme poem contest sponsored by- tania kitchin

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Sotto Poet

Date: 6/4/2023 3:32:00 PM

The departure of love has the power to transform roses into thorns, my dear Jay. Your exquisite use of language and imagery adds a layer of beauty to your poetry, making it a strong contender for the contest. Best of luck to you.

Jay Narain
Date: 6/6/2023 11:27:00 AM

Thank you

Bill Baker

Date: 6/3/2023 12:00:00 PM

Departed love can turn roses to thorns, Jay. Nice entry for the contest. Good luck! This is my first visit to your poetry, there will be more. :-) Have a nice weekend! Bill

Jay Narain
Date: 6/6/2023 11:26:00 AM

Thank you

Sand Blown

Date: 6/2/2023 2:34:00 PM

...nice poetics....'a rose arose and time became a growth event.....stan

Jay Narain
Date: 6/6/2023 11:28:00 AM

Thanks

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/2/2023 11:27:00 AM

Hi Jay, This is a good entry for the contest. You executed each form. It had a nice flow and rhythm. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day and weekend-Alexis

Jay Narain
Date: 6/6/2023 11:28:00 AM

Thanks

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 6/1/2023 9:26:00 PM

A truly magnificent poem, Jay ~ good luck in the contest

Jay Narain
Date: 6/6/2023 11:29:00 AM

Thanks

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/1/2023 1:30:00 PM

This is really beautiful. I do know that Tania likes nature and no emotions shown, which is kind of difficult to do in haiku sometimes. Some haiku writers DO use human emotion as you do. I love this.

Jay Narain
Date: 6/6/2023 11:31:00 AM

Thanks Andrea. I followed your advice, took it out of contest. I have a new one titled :"Tulips".