Melody of Sadness


A saddening song swishes subtly in the bitter breeze, 

Mad mournful music meets me everywhere I move, 

Like a dolorous dirge drumming through the dark; 

Wistful winds wearily bring to mind stinging salt drops,  

All energy expended in trying to make sense of this forlorn fusion

As a painfully pensive psalm is penned down 
						in the ragged remnants of war...


10/25/17


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Dietrich Avatar
November 19, 2017 at 11:56 PM
Back to say congratulations on a very well deserved win.
Inman Avatar
November 15, 2017 at 5:02 AM
Jo, you have written a sad but poignant piece, a beautiful depiction of the theme of contest.
Nusker Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 6:50 AM
One of the best I have read, entered for this contest. Congrats on your win!!
Dietrich Avatar
November 2, 2017 at 7:53 PM
another outstanding poem from you. You are on a roll with these last two I have seen!!
Lindley Avatar
November 2, 2017 at 9:43 AM
Exceptional verses by a kind and very talented poetess. You always deliver my friend. Truly admire your depths of your talent and your admirable character! A fav...
Onclaud Avatar
October 31, 2017 at 3:42 PM
such a compelling write i can truly relate , jo... this is a winner and i must congratulate and thank you for penning this for the contest...
Kendrick Avatar
October 31, 2017 at 1:53 PM
Sad that there are wars but some good songs have come out of such tragic events in our world..Someday there will be no more war..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
Roper Avatar
October 30, 2017 at 4:58 PM
Congratulations, Jo, for a great write ! Hugs Eve ~`*
Haight Avatar
October 30, 2017 at 4:46 PM
A very powerful poem, Jo. I so much agree with Janis' comment below. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
Andresen Avatar
October 30, 2017 at 3:07 PM
- I knew this was a winning poem, Jo :) - Congratulations !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Medders Tobechi Avatar
October 30, 2017 at 2:07 PM
This can happen in some countries and it may not even be in a war. Innocent people are just slaughtered today for all kinds of insane reasons. Your poem has metaphoric magic and is well written. Congratulations on your win.
Teagan Avatar
October 29, 2017 at 9:18 PM
war is awful :(
Andresen Avatar
October 29, 2017 at 3:44 PM
- Heartbreaking, Jo - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Cresswell Avatar
October 28, 2017 at 1:40 PM
Great beauty in the saddness. It is because of the words you have chosen with which you told this tale.
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 4:10 PM
Jo your use of alliteration is superb in this moving poem that grips the heart. Brought tears to my eyes. I hope it takes top honors! A Fave for me! : )
Trifiatis Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 1:00 PM
Sadness wrapped in poetic beauty dear little sister! Good luck!
One Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 4:26 PM
This is really sad with some sad lines.. A good choice for the contest..
Krampe Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 7:11 AM
I love your use of alliteration, Jo. It is impossible to make sense of war. Great sad poem, good luck in the contest.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 25, 2017 at 10:39 PM
Love the final line!
Lane Avatar
October 25, 2017 at 1:35 PM
Usually I'm distracted by a plethora of alliteration in a poem, but not the case in yours, Jo. Each adjective you've chosen only highlights the messages you so skillfully send. Well done with this piece, Jo!
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