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Melody of Sadness

A saddening song swishes subtly in the bitter breeze, Mad mournful music meets me everywhere I move, Like a dolorous dirge drumming through the dark; Wistful winds wearily bring to mind stinging salt drops, All energy expended in trying to make sense of this forlorn fusion As a painfully pensive psalm is penned down in the ragged remnants of war... 10/25/17

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Date: 11/19/2017 11:56:00 PM
Back to say congratulations on a very well deserved win.
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Date: 11/15/2017 5:02:00 AM
Jo, you have written a sad but poignant piece, a beautiful depiction of the theme of contest.
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Date: 11/6/2017 6:50:00 AM
One of the best I have read, entered for this contest. Congrats on your win!!
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Date: 11/2/2017 7:53:00 PM
another outstanding poem from you. You are on a roll with these last two I have seen!!
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Date: 11/2/2017 9:43:00 AM
Exceptional verses by a kind and very talented poetess. You always deliver my friend. Truly admire your depths of your talent and your admirable character! A fav...
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Date: 10/31/2017 3:42:00 PM
such a compelling write i can truly relate , jo... this is a winner and i must congratulate and thank you for penning this for the contest...
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Date: 10/31/2017 1:53:00 PM
Sad that there are wars but some good songs have come out of such tragic events in our world..Someday there will be no more war..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 10/30/2017 4:58:00 PM
Congratulations, Jo, for a great write ! Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 10/30/2017 4:46:00 PM
A very powerful poem, Jo. I so much agree with Janis' comment below. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/30/2017 3:07:00 PM
- I knew this was a winning poem, Jo :) - Congratulations !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/30/2017 2:07:00 PM
This can happen in some countries and it may not even be in a war. Innocent people are just slaughtered today for all kinds of insane reasons. Your poem has metaphoric magic and is well written. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 10/29/2017 9:18:00 PM
war is awful :(
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Date: 10/29/2017 3:44:00 PM
- Heartbreaking, Jo - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/28/2017 1:40:00 PM
Great beauty in the saddness. It is because of the words you have chosen with which you told this tale.
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Date: 10/27/2017 4:10:00 PM
Jo your use of alliteration is superb in this moving poem that grips the heart. Brought tears to my eyes. I hope it takes top honors! A Fave for me! : )
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Date: 10/27/2017 1:00:00 PM
Sadness wrapped in poetic beauty dear little sister! Good luck!
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Date: 10/26/2017 4:26:00 PM
This is really sad with some sad lines.. A good choice for the contest..
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Date: 10/26/2017 7:11:00 AM
I love your use of alliteration, Jo. It is impossible to make sense of war. Great sad poem, good luck in the contest.
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Date: 10/25/2017 10:39:00 PM
Love the final line!
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Date: 10/25/2017 1:35:00 PM
Usually I'm distracted by a plethora of alliteration in a poem, but not the case in yours, Jo. Each adjective you've chosen only highlights the messages you so skillfully send. Well done with this piece, Jo!
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