Mellowed Exodus

The long day's closing
She sheds her soft robe, red, gold
As night blankets day
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Kendrick Avatar
December 6, 2010 at 5:46 PM
Great descriptive of a sunset..Glad that I chose this one to read this eve..Thanks for the comments on my work..I appreciate you stopping by my poems and my blog..Sara
Muzzey Avatar
March 10, 2010 at 8:44 AM
A wonderful Haiku, congratulations on your win. Caryl
Palli Avatar
February 23, 2010 at 10:10 AM
Lots of talent you have!
Smith-Johnsen Avatar
February 20, 2010 at 4:24 AM
Sweet dreams! A restful, beauty in this haiku. Keep those images glowing. Smiles, Dane Ann
Fraser Avatar
February 19, 2010 at 11:34 AM
Audrey, this is an exceptional Haiku >> James
Omaidin Avatar
February 18, 2010 at 12:02 PM
Beautifukly descriptive piece. many congratulations on your sucess. REgards: Déirdre
Smith Avatar
February 18, 2010 at 7:15 AM
this is a really great poem, i loved the part about shedding her robe red gold, that sounded beautiful. congrats on your when in the seascape contest!!!!! =)jo
Delacroix Avatar
February 17, 2010 at 11:35 PM
Congrats on your win, dear Audrey! Well deserved. Best wishes, Caroline.
Dufresne Avatar
February 16, 2010 at 3:16 PM
very pretty Audrey. congrats on your fine poem here!
Dietrich Avatar
February 16, 2010 at 1:03 PM
LOVE it, Audrey. Congratulations on your big win. Andrea
Smith-Johnsen Avatar
February 16, 2010 at 5:27 AM
Congratulations Audrey, on your 2nd place win in Raul’s “Seascapes” poetry contest with this creative haiku. I love the last line, "As night blankets day. Your poem is outstanding. Keep the winning words flowing! Smiles, Dane Ann
Brown Avatar
February 16, 2010 at 5:21 AM
Congratulations on your win in Raul's Seascape contest Audrey. Love,Carol
Strand Avatar
February 16, 2010 at 3:08 AM
Congrats on your success with this one Audrey.Rgds Brian
Hilliker Avatar
February 15, 2010 at 7:49 PM
Congrats on placing 2nd in Raul's contest. Beautiful Haiku.
Richards Avatar
February 15, 2010 at 5:30 PM
I knew this would do well!!! Congratulations dear Audrey....so well deserved! :)
Owens Avatar
February 15, 2010 at 4:39 PM
Congratulations Audrey..Marty
Foster Avatar
February 15, 2010 at 4:30 PM
Congratulations on your success in the contest Audrey, well done...Margaret
Sweetheart Avatar
February 15, 2010 at 3:04 PM
Congrats Audrey on your 2nd place win in the Seascapes contest.. a wonderful win for a wonderful poetess.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
Moreno Avatar
February 15, 2010 at 2:16 PM
Audrey, congratulations on placing second in my contest...Raul
Brown Avatar
February 15, 2010 at 11:57 AM
Thank you for sharing your poetry with us today Audrey. I enjoyed reading it. Wishing you the best always. Love, Carol
Richards Avatar
February 15, 2010 at 8:20 AM
Oh wow!! I think this is the best I've read, Audrey!! What a unique, and outstanding twist on the contest....I love this!!~ Good luck! Love, Carrie
Sweetheart Avatar
February 14, 2010 at 7:15 PM
Oh I like this one Audrey.. such a sensuous Haiku .. at least I read it that way.. and your title is terrific.. luv.. and good luck if your contest entry.. Linda-Marie..
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace