Melancholic Gaze

Awakened from a mid-sleep tingle of the wind ,your absent body drifts gently like a formless cloud into night’s minutes: a holy air which smells of musk, weaving through a quiet stillness of tender love’s fervor. Just there, graced calm lingers mildly in our own space: this yearning embrace of your as foggy arms cuddles my entire spirit… and this gentle evening turns warm, remembering your life has reached its final time: the pain melts like colored mist as loops of distance widen, your beautiful shadow slowly, slowly evaporating… I return to this one and only dream-like visit with a question and melancholic gaze… “ Dad, why did you have to leave us so suddenly?” Nayda Ivette Negron’s Melancholy Contest 9/26/2016 -------- * My Dad passed on alone in his death bed; we were all requested to go home for a while after spending hours in the ICU of a military hospital.
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Date: 9/28/2016 3:49:00 PM
So very sad, Nette. I can so much identify with your pain...both my parents passed alone in the hospital after the same suggestion that we leave. Such melancholic imagery in your Dramatic Verse poem, and congratulations on your placement. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 9/27/2016 3:40:00 PM
I am so sorry for the loss you suffered at the time and in the way it happened. You are a masterful poet fully deserving of constant praise. A Fav.
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Date: 9/27/2016 1:32:00 PM
Love this line, "the pain melts like colored mist as loops of distance widens," Nette. Nit-picking: Shouldn't it be singular, widen? Congrats! :-)
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Date: 9/27/2016 9:53:00 AM
Congratulations Nette on the placement of the contest
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Date: 9/27/2016 9:50:00 AM
wow Nette-I am so sorry for your loss lovely lady...prayers with you....congratulations on your placement in the contest :)-luloo
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Date: 9/27/2016 1:04:00 AM
Well done great poem x
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Date: 9/26/2016 3:57:00 PM
Thanks for posting this gem my friend. Good luck in the contest...........A.M.
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Date: 9/26/2016 1:18:00 PM
I watched my grandfather pass over. I can relate to everything you have wrote and you wrote it with love. Blessings Carl
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Date: 9/26/2016 11:51:00 AM
I can relate too Nette we were called to get to the hospice but got there 15 minutes too late - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/26/2016 10:52:00 AM
This brings back memories of my dad's passing Nette. So bittersweet! I can easily relate. beautifully penned!
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