Mall

MALL It takes all kinds All kinds and shapes (Let’s single one out) I wonder what he does? Eats” Where he lives? What he THINKS? Some kind deliverance denies access Along the scale-line of good and evil positive and negative is there music? What color is red? What are his personal private dimensions? I sit on a bench fascinated; They all pass by – sale-duped And if you watch long enough you forget self - The faces! Bodies! Heights! The strides! - You brush guilt aside Laugh like hell inside

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James Peranteau

Date: 12/9/2010 8:55:00 AM

This write is great Dave, it's going in mine favz Sir, if ya don't mind ! I'm a train station dude myself; now there's where you'll get some shots ! And as for "Patch work"..more like poked his other eye->out ! With the evidence in sight<-lol; he had it coming ! Hence, in (verse 5),"his piercing eye", not eyes ! "Patch" as in, eye patch. And by the by Dave, this is but a whimsical write sir, Don't ya just hate when dudes check your babe out, when yer right there !? lol. much love, james

Sylvia Coulstock

Date: 11/22/2010 8:47:00 PM

Hi Daver.I'm a people watcher too.(We) fascinate me.I Look at their faces,so many frowns.Yet not the young ,they pour out of the college so uninhibited loud voices and laughter but then the world belongs to them.It's the old that touch me that appear lonely and look so tired.On a lighter note re your poem which I really enjoyed I also wonder what kind of houses they live in and love to watch the children.Agree, we're all unique,so is our poetry.Glad you liked mine,thanks Love June(Sylvia)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/22/2010 3:55:00 PM

lol,, how you observe one,,, and figure what they are all about,,lol,,, yes, the guilt might over power me,,so i think,, i will not enjoy,, the laugh,, because he or she might be laughing at me..p.d

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/20/2010 7:45:00 AM

That is fun to watch people..We see all kinds..God surely has a sense of humor..Sara

Wilma Neels

Date: 11/20/2010 6:09:00 AM

This write reminds me of a friend of mine.. She tend to go to the mall just to stare at people and their mannerisms. Enjoyed this Dave.. Hope your weekend will be a good one ;) love Wilma

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/18/2010 1:48:00 PM

are you a mall rat watcher, dear daver? If I were in a mall and sitting down (almost unheard of!) I 'd be working on a poem probably. Anyway, this is great fun. In the same way that rhyme is natural for me, this style of capturing things in a very interesting way, this is your forte in free verse! Luv, Andrea

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 11/18/2010 12:55:00 PM

Nice expressions of how you sit on a bench and the people all pass by " sale-duped, daver

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/18/2010 10:36:00 AM

Having just returned from Christmas shopping, I saw many of the "sale-duped" faces at the stores. It's like they're in a trance, reciting, "Take my money, please, I want my family to have a Merry Christmas. We seem to have lost the true meaning of the season. Much love, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 11/18/2010 8:45:00 AM

thanks for your comments. How true to say the the holidays brings out a child in man,daver

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/18/2010 8:20:00 AM

Kudos on the weight loss luv.. that is huge and u must look like one of the magazine cover men ..now.. I too was always a 'chunky' thing as a child.. then I discovered boys..and I am now a healthy 107 .. luving it especially Summer and bikini.. time.. wow.. what fun... luv..

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/18/2010 8:19:00 AM

The Mall is the place to go Dave to see the sights.. we have three close by in my neighborhood .. great lines ..so enjoyed and appreciate your taking time to read my lines today as well.. luv this play on words my friend.. be blessed and 60 years.. don't know if Ron and I will make 60 but so far three months has been fantabulous.. luv..full of sweet treats..

Joshua Harris

Date: 11/18/2010 8:02:00 AM

great poem, I like to people watch also. I try to imagine what their life is like and sometimes make up my own stories with them.