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Malicious Intent

frail and innocent		
she let her defences down
enticed by glib words...
now, like a crypto virus,
he holds her heart to ransom.


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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/7/2018 8:16:00 PM

AT last, I found one I had not yet seen!! Good one, Paul!! And why has this contest not been judged yet? Or has it??

Paul Callus
Date: 2/8/2018 9:44:00 AM

I have a feeling that it has not, as yet, been judged. Sorry you have to keep searching for 'unseen' poems; it's time for Soup to install something (like on twitter) to let us know which poems we have clicked on or not. Regards // paul

Maria Williams

Date: 1/7/2018 3:43:00 AM

Oh this is sad and manipulative tanka. So true of a lot unsuspecting women - you have certainly unraveled a plot in five lines - All the best for the contest - You certainly deserve to win. A FAVE from me ...Maria

Paul Callus
Date: 1/7/2018 8:47:00 AM

Thank you for your insightful comments, Maria, and even more for the unexpected fav ~ Hope you are not working too hard! Regards // paul

Silent One

Date: 1/3/2018 1:36:00 PM

A manipulative tanka... You did this very well Paul..

Paul Callus
Date: 1/3/2018 4:33:00 PM

Thank you, S-1. Pleased you liked it. Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/3/2018 7:28:00 AM

You depict a sad truth..well written, impacting words..best for a win, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/3/2018 4:05:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Vijay. Regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

Date: 1/3/2018 6:44:00 AM

Such a deep one Paul... I enjoyed it...

Paul Callus
Date: 1/3/2018 4:29:00 PM

Glad you did, Supraja...thank you! Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/3/2018 2:14:00 AM

fragile and vulnerable; i enjoyed your beautifully sad refrain, paul.. huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 1/3/2018 4:28:00 PM

Thank you, Nette. A pleasure to have you popping in...you have been missed:) Hugs // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/3/2018 2:13:00 AM

This captivates Paul. I hope it gets top honors in the contest! : )

Paul Callus
Date: 1/3/2018 4:23:00 PM

Thank you, Connie. I hope the sponsor likes it too:) Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/2/2018 9:12:00 PM

Ohhh how insidiously this cad operates, Paul. The contrast in motivations between the 'she' and the 'he' in your poem is striking, like white/black. I love the use of the term 'crypto virus', it lends such strong dark imagery to your last two lines. Your excellent write certainly lives up to its wonderfully perfect title :) Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 1/3/2018 4:10:00 PM

You certainly know how to positively unwrap and lay bare a poem, Susan! Thank you for the lovely feedback. ~ Warm regards // paul

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 1/2/2018 8:16:00 PM

Ohhhhh...Paul, I absolutely love this tanka! "crypto virus"...Good luck in the contest. This is a winner in my book.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/3/2018 2:49:00 PM

Love your reaction, Rhonda:) This was inspired by the CryptoLocker ransomware attack that caused lots of headaches some 3 years ago. Thank you for the faith you put in it. Regards // paul