A rewrite
I wrote the original as lyrics for a song. I had Witney Huston's 'All Atnce Oncen' on a loop all night'
Soon after my Parents, Bless, them sadly passed away.
I must have written 40 or more ss that night.
A rewrite. It's been a long cold dark lonely winter Since you went away I live in limbo And torture myself every single day The sun used to shine my way But now turns the other way A shadow of my former self Maniculed and chained to your heart Left on a dust covered shelf I sit on the top of the stairs in my mind Staring down To the floor Thinking where I had been before After you shut the door Punches to the heart Stab in the back Sank in quicksand And never got out A cat in a sack Since you left me wounded The garden we planted together Is no more The ocean had stopped Rolling to my shore Now a barren desert where nothing grows No scented flowers or cherry blossom No lush bejewelled green meadow Where we used to make love Under a shady tree I gave to you And you gave to me The pages of time have faded Have been turned over so many times By boisterous rebelling gusts of wind But still etched in my And enraged upon the tablet of my heart Now you are back again My winter has gone And now the sun shines once more You undid my shackles And unlocked the door I Never hated you I could never do As I know all your secrets How you were mistreated Tormented and abused But now you are back again To see your beautiful face once more Is like seeing the sun again After that cold dark lonely winter To hold you again in my arms My troubles disappear But now you are here my precious friend Make my lonely Barren desert Bloom once again.
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