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Make Me Some Room

When times were rough And hope was gone You showed me stuff -to carry on When things were lean When things got thin And cold outside You let me in For want of warmth And others turned You made a fire But I never got burnt When I was stoned at the station I waited for a train You came to fetch me And freed me from pain You helped me up When I was stuck on the ground That look you gave ... I knew that sound You gave me money When I was broke You made me laugh With stupid jokes You gave me wisdom When I was dumb When things were strict We had some fun When I was cripple You pushed my chair You solved my trouble You were always there Alone in the trenches You got my back You fought like a demon When they attacked My promise is this: Ill try to go on Ill try to let go You go on now Just follow the light Ill follow you soon You go on ahead now Go make me some room

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Caycay Jennings

Date: 11/25/2017 4:47:00 AM

Oh, my dear, Jannie, where to start? First, the joy tickle from your mention of me in your intro, thanks. THIS POEM IS ONE OF THE TOP POEMS OF ALL THE POEMS I HAVE READ ON THIS SITE IN SUM TOTAL. Tired, so hope that made sense. Some of the phrasing and words blew me away. No doubt your's is a writers heart and this poem is your heart in gold for all to behold as it touches their emotion known and unfolds its unknown, layered roots in a poetic gift of clarity. You bled on this one for us all. Ca.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/25/2017 5:54:00 AM

Heck youre okay! It was just full of emotion . I dont know what to say . I can only thank you. You are absolutely wonderful Cay Cay

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 9/19/2017 3:41:00 PM

I have come back to read again. I can't tell you exactly why but it evokes feelings of sadness and peace. Thank ou.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/20/2017 1:26:00 AM

So happy to have you here . I have some victory to celebrate and found my serenity in meditation every morning. Im no longer so sad and the stress just melts away. Have a blessed day Patricia

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 9/11/2017 7:29:00 AM

A well penned piece. Your words bring us into this poem. May you not be in too much of a rush to take your place.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/12/2017 12:45:00 PM

Hey Scott37 . Thanks I lts so nice to have a compliment when times were low..its looking better.now. Honda is back from hell I think

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 8/16/2017 8:09:00 AM

This will be difficult for me to live up too. I can be a bit of a curmudgeon But I humbly thank you for this gift.

Jannie Breedt
Date: 9/3/2017 7:36:00 AM

Well I am plain cantankerous . Itanfutile to try and change. It.just goes with the territory Ha ha.

Patricia Cresswell
Date: 8/16/2017 8:12:00 AM

There is always room!

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 8/16/2017 5:31:00 AM

This is beautiful, my friend, though I'm so sorry for the loss that inspired it ... grief is as common as happiness, (and as important, in ways), but so much tougher on the soul. Gorgeous poem, Jannie - I hope you are well. I don't "see" you around as much lately, but I know you're busy. Drop me a note anytime, (you still have my email?) Love you, Bud.