Premiere Contest WinnerMachinating the Manger Scene

Machinating the manger scene

The little shepherd sat at night
and kept his sheep within his sight
he gazed up at the starry night
and saw one star was shining bright
onto a solitary manger site
inside a candle gave its light
two images appeared in sight
and in a straw crib was a child
so beautiful with manner mild
encompassed by a sandy drift
he smiled and wished to give a gift
and from a lamb its wool was sheared
with nothing else though he still cared
he rolled it into a wooly ball
a present that he would recall
he saw three figures enter near
and stayed behind to watch with care
gifts were presented with blessed intent
one had offered a pleasant scent 
they bowed before them as they went
Mary, the mother saw the boy 
and beckoned him to enter in
she thanked him for the little toy
I’ll remember you and the wooly ball
“Your welcome ma’am, my name is Saul”

Cool Writes and Imagination Contest
Sponsored by Kim Rodrigues
November 22, 2018

* Saul became Paul an apostle in later years
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Dietrich Avatar
December 31, 2018 at 11:14 AM
I see you got a trophy win here. Wow, and a big congrats to you for that. Let me check my soupmail again to see if you have a note for me on the collab.
Sergi Avatar
March 20, 2019 at 4:29 PM
Hi Andrea: The poem I collaborated is almost done. I'll send it to you to see if you can finish or change it
De Beaulieu Avatar
December 2, 2018 at 8:09 PM
Hello Ralph, this is a beautifully creted poem written by you. Have a nice evening my friend.
Sergi Avatar
December 3, 2018 at 10:27 AM
Thank you , Darlene for your lovely comment.
Devonshire Avatar
December 2, 2018 at 5:08 PM
Wow! This is brilliant, Ralph, and well deserving of a top win. I was totally engrossed by the story. We are wise to remember that it is not the quality of a gift, but the idea that we were remembered which means the most. Beautifully penned! Congrats on your win. Hugs, Carolyn
Sergi Avatar
December 3, 2018 at 10:29 AM
Thank you, Carolyn: It feels good to get 1st place once in a while.
Haight Avatar
November 30, 2018 at 8:03 PM
Such a lovely Nativity poem, Ralph. Congratulations on your well-deserved Trophy win! And, I wish you a Blessed Christmas. Sandra
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November 30, 2018 at 12:18 AM
I'm glad this got the trophy, it is deserved. Fine rhyme, imagery and story-telling via poetry. I truly enjoyed spending time with this poem. All the best ... CayCay
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November 29, 2018 at 2:56 AM
Happy Holidays, Ralph - blessings and sincere congratulations for your excellent win in Kim's "Cool Writes & Imagination" contest ... keep up the great work, my friend! :-)
Sergi Avatar
November 29, 2018 at 11:07 AM
Thank you, Gregory: It's nice not to get a N/A so often
Roper Avatar
November 28, 2018 at 5:54 PM
love your spiritual write, Ralph, congratulations on your win...
Sergi Avatar
November 30, 2018 at 1:30 PM
Thank you, Eve: And I wish you happy holidays!
Onclaud Avatar
November 28, 2018 at 2:53 PM
what a glorious inspiration for the season, ralph... best congrats on your highest spot... huggs
Gondolf Avatar
November 28, 2018 at 2:01 PM
Ralph, congrats on your trophy win for this wonderful Nativity poem. John
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November 28, 2018 at 1:37 PM
Ralph, congratulations on your top win in my contest! You have depicted a lovely nativity where the rhyme scheme moves us at a fast pace through the scene. You bring us right into the stable, produce a “wooly toy”, gift us with the pleasant scent of gifts and in the end surprise us with a visit from “Saul”
Sergi Avatar
November 29, 2018 at 11:25 AM
Thank you for your consideration, Kim. I really feel honored.
Allison Avatar
November 28, 2018 at 1:37 PM
an absolute joy to read and perfect for the time of year! Many congrats on your trophy win Ralph:-) hugs Jan xx
Sergi Avatar
November 29, 2018 at 11:22 AM
Thank you, Jan and a happy holiday to you and yours!
Dietrich Avatar
November 24, 2018 at 7:10 PM
a Revelation! For me, I too thought of Saul who became paul. Nicely done.
Sergi Avatar
November 25, 2018 at 8:13 AM
Thank you, Andrea: I hope you had a pleasant Thanksgiving
Sergi Avatar
November 23, 2018 at 7:03 AM
Thank you, Dear Heart I always think of the shepherds when this story is told. By the way, Saul became Paul in later years.
La France Avatar
November 22, 2018 at 4:36 PM
Ralph, wow, I love this write of yours, it truly touched my heart, best of luck in the contest but this is a winner to me and a FAV ~
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