Machinating the Manger Scene Premiere Contest Winner

Machinating the manger scene

The little shepherd sat at night
and kept his sheep within his sight
he gazed up at the starry night
and saw one star was shining bright
onto a solitary manger site
inside a candle gave its light
two images appeared in sight
and in a straw crib was a child
so beautiful with manner mild
encompassed by a sandy drift
he smiled and wished to give a gift
and from a lamb its wool was sheared
with nothing else though he still cared
he rolled it into a wooly ball
a present that he would recall
he saw three figures enter near
and stayed behind to watch with care
gifts were presented with blessed intent
one had offered a pleasant scent 
they bowed before them as they went
Mary, the mother saw the boy 
and beckoned him to enter in
she thanked him for the little toy
I’ll remember you and the wooly ball
“Your welcome ma’am, my name is Saul”

Cool Writes and Imagination Contest
Sponsored by Kim Rodrigues
November 22, 2018

* Saul became Paul an apostle in later years

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 12/31/2018 11:14:00 AM
I see you got a trophy win here. Wow, and a big congrats to you for that. Let me check my soupmail again to see if you have a note for me on the collab.
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Ralph Sergi
Date: 3/20/2019 4:29:00 PM
Hi Andrea: The poem I collaborated is almost done. I'll send it to you to see if you can finish or change it
Date: 12/2/2018 8:09:00 PM
Hello Ralph, this is a beautifully creted poem written by you. Have a nice evening my friend.
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Ralph Sergi
Date: 12/3/2018 10:27:00 AM
Thank you , Darlene for your lovely comment.
Date: 12/2/2018 5:08:00 PM
Wow! This is brilliant, Ralph, and well deserving of a top win. I was totally engrossed by the story. We are wise to remember that it is not the quality of a gift, but the idea that we were remembered which means the most. Beautifully penned! Congrats on your win. Hugs, Carolyn
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Ralph Sergi
Date: 12/3/2018 10:29:00 AM
Thank you, Carolyn: It feels good to get 1st place once in a while.
Date: 11/30/2018 8:03:00 PM
Such a lovely Nativity poem, Ralph. Congratulations on your well-deserved Trophy win! And, I wish you a Blessed Christmas. Sandra
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Date: 11/30/2018 12:18:00 AM
I'm glad this got the trophy, it is deserved. Fine rhyme, imagery and story-telling via poetry. I truly enjoyed spending time with this poem. All the best ... CayCay
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Date: 11/29/2018 2:56:00 AM
Happy Holidays, Ralph - blessings and sincere congratulations for your excellent win in Kim's "Cool Writes & Imagination" contest ... keep up the great work, my friend! :-)
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Ralph Sergi
Date: 11/29/2018 11:07:00 AM
Thank you, Gregory: It's nice not to get a N/A so often
Date: 11/28/2018 5:54:00 PM
love your spiritual write, Ralph, congratulations on your win...
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Ralph Sergi
Date: 11/30/2018 1:30:00 PM
Thank you, Eve: And I wish you happy holidays!
Date: 11/28/2018 2:53:00 PM
what a glorious inspiration for the season, ralph... best congrats on your highest spot... huggs
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Date: 11/28/2018 2:01:00 PM
Ralph, congrats on your trophy win for this wonderful Nativity poem. John
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Date: 11/28/2018 1:37:00 PM
Ralph, congratulations on your top win in my contest! You have depicted a lovely nativity where the rhyme scheme moves us at a fast pace through the scene. You bring us right into the stable, produce a “wooly toy”, gift us with the pleasant scent of gifts and in the end surprise us with a visit from “Saul”
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Ralph Sergi
Date: 11/29/2018 11:25:00 AM
Thank you for your consideration, Kim. I really feel honored.
Date: 11/28/2018 1:37:00 PM
an absolute joy to read and perfect for the time of year! Many congrats on your trophy win Ralph:-) hugs Jan xx
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Ralph Sergi
Date: 11/29/2018 11:22:00 AM
Thank you, Jan and a happy holiday to you and yours!
Date: 11/24/2018 7:10:00 PM
a Revelation! For me, I too thought of Saul who became paul. Nicely done.
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Ralph Sergi
Date: 11/25/2018 8:13:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea: I hope you had a pleasant Thanksgiving
Date: 11/23/2018 7:03:00 AM
Thank you, Dear Heart I always think of the shepherds when this story is told. By the way, Saul became Paul in later years.
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Date: 11/22/2018 4:36:00 PM
Ralph, wow, I love this write of yours, it truly touched my heart, best of luck in the contest but this is a winner to me and a FAV ~
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