David Mohn Poet Verse

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Lune - Childhood

it often feels
as though life gathers stones
upon puerile sand

rising toward hubris
ever further from the source
…fragile as innocence

11 May 2020
Contest: Flow With The Collum Lune
Sponsor: Nette Onclaud
Visual: 2

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Line Gauthier April 8, 2021 at 9:46 PM lovely, David ~

Jeanne Mcgee May 24, 2020 at 7:27 AM Love the last line...congrats on your top win.

Sam Kauffman May 14, 2020 at 2:37 PM David, congratulations to you on your top placement in Nette's contest. Outstanding line, your conclusion, "fragile as innocence."

John Lawless May 14, 2020 at 8:11 AM But mostly we skip this flat ones across the smooth surface of life's pond. Great take on the stones David

Eve Roper May 13, 2020 at 11:03 PM David, congratulations on your win in Nette's contest. Hugs Eve

Kim Rodrigues May 13, 2020 at 8:14 PM Love this and especially when I remember the visual! Cool! Congratulations on first place, David!

Suzanne Delaney May 13, 2020 at 6:47 PM Congratulations David...some great lines and a well deserved win in Nette’s contest.nSuZ

Mohan Chutani May 13, 2020 at 6:38 PM David, wonderful description of life..fragile as innocence. Congrats. Mohan

Paul Callus May 13, 2020 at 1:18 PM This is a beautiful, creative take on the visual you chose, David! Congratulations on placing first! Regards // paul

Aditi Mishra May 13, 2020 at 12:03 PM Such a simple smooth flow of emotions :) Congratulations on your deserving win!

Tom Cunningham May 12, 2020 at 3:59 AM Like your interpretation of the stones David, the first one I've seen with visual 2. Good luck Tom