Jan Allison Poet Verse

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Lune - Aging

gnarled arthritic fingers
no longer can dance across
ebony and ivory

her active mind
recalls notes she once played
musical memories linger

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FLOW WITH THE COLLUM LUNE Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Nette Onclaud

05/11/20

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Sam Kauffman May 14, 2020 at 3:10 PM Hi Jan, congratulations on your win in Nette's contest. Music does have a life of its own, even when it cannot be played as it once was. A message of hope that shines through melancholy and grief for what once was. Jan Allison May 14, 2020 at 3:13 PM thanks for your insightful comment Sam:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues May 13, 2020 at 10:12 PM One of my faves for this contest! Congratulations, Jan! Jan Allison May 14, 2020 at 12:38 PM thanks so much Kim, I rarely write melancholy themes but this picture just spoke to me:-) hugs Jan xx

Mohan Chutani May 13, 2020 at 6:52 PM Jan, music remains in heart despite any condition. Congrats on this fine win.Mohan Jan Allison May 14, 2020 at 12:37 PM thanks Mohan:-) hugs jan xx

John Watt May 13, 2020 at 1:16 PM This image really brings out the sense of nostalgia and aging. You took it to a deep place by connecting it to a pianist who can no longer play. Lovely melancholy writing, dear Jan. Congrats on your win ~ John Jan Allison May 14, 2020 at 12:37 PM Yes i definitely can write more melancholy poems as a result of being separated from mum for about 10 weeks now:-( hugs Jan xx John Watt May 13, 2020 at 4:58 PM Jan, you excel at whatever style you write in. Maybe being separated from our dear ones is helping bring out the sadness muse. Jan Allison May 13, 2020 at 1:34 PM Thanks John its rare for me to write sad poems but the image spoke to me of age and decay:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus May 13, 2020 at 1:08 PM Gnarled arthritic fingers and the old broken piano fit each other like a glove, Jan. For many, the only things left are memories. Congratulations on your podium finish. Hugs // paul Jan Allison May 13, 2020 at 1:33 PM I see it at mum;s care home Paul, they have a lady come in once a week to play to them of course its all stopped now but I recall one lady in particular I had seen her with her hands up as though she is playing the piano herself:-( hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane May 13, 2020 at 4:56 AM You already know you're in my tight circle. Piano keys have a special place in my memory... contest results will be interesting. Jan Allison May 13, 2020 at 7:23 AM Thanks Lin -- I do hope I place :-) hugs Jan xx

Ann Gilmour May 12, 2020 at 6:24 PM Getting older is not always fun, as things start to deteriorate! Your tender words show how these inevitable changes take place , both in our body and in our brain. Beautifully written Jan. With kindest thoughts Ann xx Jan Allison May 12, 2020 at 6:29 PM Thanks Ann, I found the image so sad and it took me to a deep dark place, thanks for dropping by, hope you and the family are keeping ok, do you still have your grandson with you? hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 12, 2020 at 5:00 PM I really like this, Jan. I saw that contest filling so fast and just jotted something down. I did not use a picture and had to do another one!! Jan Allison May 12, 2020 at 5:21 PM thanks Andrea, its filling so fast already:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham May 12, 2020 at 3:51 AM Love your interpretation Jan, I went for that one too. My first wasnt pianos or stones, then I read the rules lol. Tom Jan Allison May 12, 2020 at 5:20 PM I saw the second poem you posted and was going to mail you then i read your piano poem - I've screwed up on contests many times lol:-) hugs jan xx

Gershon Wolf May 12, 2020 at 1:18 AM Those memories and neural circuits are all there, unable to be activated. Very sympathetic-empathetic write, Jan! :) gw Jan Allison May 12, 2020 at 3:10 AM Thanks GW I've seen it at mum's care home, stay well my friend eye sea ewe have aye back xxx:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues May 11, 2020 at 10:13 PM Difficult when memories linger with no follow through. Great work! Jan Allison May 12, 2020 at 3:09 AM Thanks Kim, I hope Nette likes my take on the image, :-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Koplin May 11, 2020 at 6:45 PM Great work Jan. I love the picture, it really adds to the imagery. Jan Allison May 11, 2020 at 6:47 PM It was a wonderful picture that Nette found to inspire us:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith May 11, 2020 at 4:46 PM Like losing love, perfect art accompaniment. Loved it Jan... Jan Allison May 11, 2020 at 5:12 PM thanks Charlie, Nette gave us the image to inspire us, I found this so painfully sad to look at hence the theme of the poem:-) hugs Jan xx