Lune--Dolor

black white keys cowed in pain and hurt great and deep years of dreams sear by one's blind trust spent by age 5/10/2020 visual 1 FLOW WITH THE COLLOM LUNE Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Nette Onclaud

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Paul Callus

Date: 5/19/2020 3:50:00 PM

This lovely poem is a real mover of emotions, Eve. 'Dolor' s a very suitable title. ~ Congratulations on your deserved win. Hugs // paul

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/14/2020 2:47:00 PM

Poignant and pensive, my friend. Congratulations on your win!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 5/14/2020 2:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your deep winning missive my friend.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/13/2020 9:41:00 PM

Can feel the pain! Nicely done, Eve! Congrats!

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 5/13/2020 6:53:00 PM

Yes when time runs out so do Dreams. congratulations on a fine write. SuZ

John Watt

Date: 5/13/2020 1:09:00 PM

Eve, you poured a lot of melancholy into a tiny space. Well done, and congrats ~ John

Aditi Mishra

Date: 5/13/2020 12:07:00 PM

This is so pure, with the aging of dreams and keys. Congratulations! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/11/2020 8:40:00 PM

very poignant, just like I like 'em, Eve.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/11/2020 11:43:00 AM

Hi Eve, awesome philosopher and talented poetess is what you are. Love and hugs, Jennifer.

Mohan Chutani

Date: 5/10/2020 10:48:00 PM

Eve, life's philosophy, hidden in these black & white notes. Deep. Best. Mohan

Mohan Chutani
Date: 5/13/2020 6:44:00 PM

Coming back to congratulate you on a fine win.

Paghunda Zahid

Date: 5/10/2020 11:48:00 AM

Oh second stanza is so deep.. Love it

Silent One

Date: 5/10/2020 10:16:00 AM

Oh this is a deep one... Guess a lot of older people will relate to this one..

Beata Agustin

Date: 5/10/2020 6:50:00 AM

Thanks for this, making me somehow nostalgic. Thanks likewise for my placement in your recently-judged contest. Happy Mother's Day. God bless you.