Luminous

Your eyes are the Fourth of July Your smile the light of day But the light in your heart Is much brighter by far And it leaves me dazed And completely amazed Just to glimpse one tiny ray. You’re luminescent, incandescent, brilliantly bright But I know all about the fire behind the light Let me warm myself beside it Always want to reignite it Light my way and stay within my sight.

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/14/2013 7:23:00 PM

Jennie, CONGRATULATIONS, on having your poem FEATURED on the soups Home Page:-). Good-Night **Linda**

Jennie Baron
Date: 9/14/2013 8:02:00 PM

Thank you. Congratulations also on your well thought out, insightful and imaginative work.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/12/2013 4:40:00 AM

Congrats on your poem being featured this weak

Jennie Baron
Date: 9/12/2013 6:48:00 AM

Thank you so much, the response to this one has been wonderful. Have also enjoyed your work. Very intelligent and well thought out.

Poet Tacito

Date: 9/8/2013 10:23:00 AM

You captured me with the very 1st line. The stated declaration made here was vulnerable & powerful. Let the heart light up the sky. Excellent work! Cool to meet you! :)

Jennie Baron
Date: 9/8/2013 10:42:00 AM

My oh my! Your positive comments are much appreciated. That's the poem of mine that has gotten the best response. Very cool to meet you also.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/8/2013 5:50:00 AM

Welcome to P-Soup, Jennie ! - Nice to read your first poem here. - Hope you will have much pleasure to be with us. - Wishing you good luck - have a nice day! - Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours. - My first greeting to you from Norway / / / Anne-Lise :)

Jennie Baron
Date: 9/8/2013 7:22:00 AM

Greetings! I've received a wonderful welcome already (after being a member for only one day!) and it's so gratifying. A good friend put me onto this site. Hope to have more time to peruse and comment on others' work.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/7/2013 9:19:00 PM

a beautiful Poem Jennie, thank you for expressing your write and finding this site. -A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. Dropping by to invite you to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* -Looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@

Jennie Baron
Date: 9/8/2013 7:25:00 AM

Thank you so much for the positive words. I also look forward to hearing from all of you, and I'm enjoying PoetrySoup so much already. Maybe the "family" will inspire me.

Skat A

Date: 9/7/2013 8:13:00 PM

Nice Jennie, , Your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers!! Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND". Hugs* Skat *

Jennie Baron
Date: 9/8/2013 7:30:00 AM

Thanks so much for the "hug," Skat! This poem has gotten the best response, but I almost feel it's not even mine because it's from some fiction I'm tinkering with, which involves a songwriter, and it's part of one of his songs. Except he made it into a complete song, which I couldn't. Hope to have more time to chat with you.