Loving Too Strong

from the dirty hotel window he cries into the night asking God ehat he has to do to make it 
right.
thunder roars lighting strikes the walls begin to shake.
all he wanted to do was take back that horrible mistake.
he drank too much did too much drugs popped too many pills all to chase away his blues.
in that moment when he hit her and amde her cry nothing seemed real til she said goodbye.
the birds stopped chirping the sun stopped shining all he had left was his woes.
he had to man up and take responsibility but that was too hard.
shes gone away now and wont be back all behind that wicked smack.
one too many timesw he made her cry one too many times she said goodbye.
the blood started pouring from her nose and sudddenly the world as he knew it was over.
he blacked out for that moment and took control let the demons run his soul.
the reality of her being gone is too much for him to spare so he open sup the window and 
climbs ojn the ledge.
begging once more to God to please forgive him.
now there both gone!!!!!!!!!!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 5/12/2009 8:25:00 AM
I also enjoyed reading this one. Some more. Ernilando
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Date: 5/7/2009 5:19:00 PM
This is truly mind blowing! Keep posting! - jeremiah
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