Lovesick

She told me to write about love… …fine. … I gave up on you. I gave up on your testaments. I gave up on the way you said to hold on tight. You told me you would hold me like you used to. You told me you would scold me like you used to. Because I liked your attitude, Allegedly. … I would be taken aback When the sunflowers finally Noticed the rhythm in my strut When Mondays would pass by without a suicidal teardrop But still I Gave up on The endlessness Of you Striking these vindicated ivories To a song you didn’t want to hear You left me unspoken An empty chorus. Until I grabbed my pen… …to become the composer of my tomorrows. Without you. The Unnecessary. ©Tacito

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/23/2021 4:23:00 AM

Excellent writing. Interesting verse: I would be taken aback/ When the sunflowers finally/ Noticed the rhythm in my strut//You cause us to stop and ponder those lines.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/23/2021 2:55:00 PM

That’s the fun part, my friend! Sometimes the words just come.

Poet Tacito
Date: 3/23/2021 10:43:00 AM

It's funny you mention that part. I cannot really tell you where that came from. It simply happened. When I finished that part, I was stunned. Perhaps my subconscious had more to say than I realized. :) Thank you kindly, Kim!!

Fj Thomas

Date: 12/2/2020 6:52:00 AM

Lolol a blur even! We're good Drakezes. Didn't know if you were still in Cali. Glad you are safe!

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/2/2020 7:21:00 AM

Yup, still here! :) I'm relieved that you're all safe too!

Fj Thomas

Date: 12/1/2020 4:22:00 PM

Hello Drakezes ;) It's been a while. Hope this is fiction my friend. Take care ~Flo

Poet Tacito
Date: 12/1/2020 10:04:00 PM

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Hey you! How are you & the family doing??? Eh, fiction/real, it's all a blur now. lol Hope to reconnect w/you soon! Thank you so much!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/16/2020 6:42:00 PM

okay, who is it this time?...seems you are on a self-care mode; fantastic progression of thoughts with that upbeat downbeat swing!...bitterwseet it is, DJ!...huggs

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/17/2020 8:55:00 AM

LOL. Hi, Nette! I am very much in that mode. It's necessary because a LOT has happened over the past few years. Standing strong though...it's great to see you around again, Nette!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/16/2020 4:06:00 AM

The composer of my tomorrows without you-So beautiful..So sadly romantic.

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/16/2020 6:16:00 AM

Thank you, thank you again, Charmaine! Very grateful for you to be around again.

Silent One

Date: 10/15/2020 6:36:00 AM

Emotions especially sad one seem to bleed through our pens....

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/15/2020 8:11:00 AM

Gotta release somehow. Many thanks for stopping by, Silent!

Angela Crabtree

Date: 10/14/2020 1:23:00 PM

A sad story that ended well, Tacito. ..."Until I grabbed my pen to become the composer of my tomorrows". Saved to read again! ~Angie

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/14/2020 3:33:00 PM

And that was the plan. :) That is greatly appreciated, Angela! Thank you kindly!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/13/2020 7:02:00 AM

A sad one Drake. With magic pen perhaps scene two stage right will lead you back into her arms.

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/13/2020 10:13:00 AM

I'm all for new scenes. It's great to see you still here, Richard! Thanks so much!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/5/2020 1:57:00 PM

wow REALLY food stuff. My fave for the day!

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/13/2020 10:13:00 AM

Hi & thank you so much, Andrea!

James Marshall Goff

Date: 10/5/2020 8:14:00 AM

Amazing ink Tacito...reminds me of a friend here yrs ago...Drake..."Striking these..." stunning lines...to mine faves...peace

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/5/2020 11:47:00 AM

Still me! :D Thank you so much for coming by here, James!! I hope you're doing ok!