Love's Lonely Song

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The surf pounds against cliff.
I beat my pillow moaning. 
You are gone, your heart of stone
not swayed by my tears.

Onoko*-san, the bringer 
who has seeded my garden,
return like the sea otter
through the waves to me.


*onoko is the Ainu word for man

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 3/8/2015 11:32:00 AM
Wow Debbie, love the emotions in this one ;) really enjoyed your descriptive gem tonight.. xxx
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Date: 2/8/2015 5:39:00 PM
Very somber but beautiful, Debbie. For some reason, it reminds me of Puccini's opera, 'Madame Butterfly." Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/8/2015 7:32:00 AM
Emotion burns with bright fire in such longing...I like...jamesy
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Date: 2/7/2015 12:26:00 PM
I love the feel of this piece, you used the form masterfully.
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Date: 2/7/2015 7:15:00 AM
Excellent, Debbie! An emotive call coming from deep within; a contrast between the turmoil in the heart and the pounding waves. // #7 // paul
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Date: 2/6/2015 2:04:00 PM
Exceptional, Debbie...I feel the sorrow and longing of this woman...best wishes and thanks for the more than kind words on my page. You made my day! Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 2/6/2015 8:02:00 AM
Love the flow of your words, good write. Blessings and a 7
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Date: 2/5/2015 5:45:00 PM
This is quite beautiful and passionate.
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Date: 2/5/2015 5:20:00 PM
Very beautiful poem with wonderful imagery, Debbie! Thanks for sharing.
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Date: 2/5/2015 5:08:00 PM
Such deep powerful imagery Debbie - thanks for this enlightening write it is truly beautiful:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 2/5/2015 2:15:00 PM
I enjoyed your dodoitsu. HOpe I can come up with something. (finally got my Meow book!)
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Date: 2/5/2015 12:59:00 PM
Your emotions and pain wrap themselves around your words and we are left in awe. Emile. #7
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/5/2015 4:15:00 PM
What a lovely thing to say Emile - I'm very familiar with lonliness
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