Debbie Guzzi Poet Dodoitsu

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Love's Lonely Song

The surf pounds against cliff.
I beat my pillow moaning. 
You are gone, your heart of stone
not swayed by my tears.

Onoko*-san, the bringer 
who has seeded my garden,
return like the sea otter
through the waves to me.


*onoko is the Ainu word for man

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Wilma Neels March 8, 2015 at 11:32 AM Wow Debbie, love the emotions in this one ;) really enjoyed your descriptive gem tonight.. xxx

Sandra Haight February 8, 2015 at 5:39 PM Very somber but beautiful, Debbie. For some reason, it reminds me of Puccini's opera, 'Madame Butterfly." Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra

James Marshall Goff February 8, 2015 at 7:32 AM Emotion burns with bright fire in such longing...I like...jamesy

Richard Lamoureux February 7, 2015 at 12:26 PM I love the feel of this piece, you used the form masterfully.

Paul Callus February 7, 2015 at 7:15 AM Excellent, Debbie! An emotive call coming from deep within; a contrast between the turmoil in the heart and the pounding waves. // #7 // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders February 6, 2015 at 2:04 PM Exceptional, Debbie...I feel the sorrow and longing of this woman...best wishes and thanks for the more than kind words on my page. You made my day! Hugs, Rhonda

Eve Roper February 6, 2015 at 8:02 AM Love the flow of your words, good write. Blessings and a 7

M. L. Kiser February 5, 2015 at 5:45 PM This is quite beautiful and passionate.

Laura Leiser February 5, 2015 at 5:20 PM Very beautiful poem with wonderful imagery, Debbie! Thanks for sharing.

Jan Allison February 5, 2015 at 5:08 PM Such deep powerful imagery Debbie - thanks for this enlightening write it is truly beautiful:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich February 5, 2015 at 2:15 PM I enjoyed your dodoitsu. HOpe I can come up with something. (finally got my Meow book!)

Emile Pinet February 5, 2015 at 12:59 PM Your emotions and pain wrap themselves around your words and we are left in awe. Emile. #7 Debbie Guzzi February 5, 2015 at 4:15 PM What a lovely thing to say Emile - I'm very familiar with lonliness