Lovers Treason

I walk along this boardwalk
my mind full of regret.
I can't believe what happened
It hasn't completely set.

I stormed out on her,
full of steam my mind.
My emotions how they've stirred,
It was quarter after nine.

It is now ten thirty,
I've come back to the house relaxed.
I opened the door, surprised at what I saw.
my house completely trashed.

Poetry strewn about the floor
my projection screen destroyed.
Stab wounds in my leather sofa,
now I am annoyed.

A note she left on the table
described in detail her reason.
How I was unfaithful,
committing lovers treason.

So she believed it fair,
since I broke her heart.
To break me of the things I am,
and that was just the start.

The mistake that I had made
and the consequence received.
Lost me the one who I held dear
no matter how hard I'd plea.

It wasn't all the broken things,
that irritated me so.
It was being untrue, I was such a fool
That is what I get for being a hoe.

Jared Pickett
2/25/2010
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 3/1/2010 7:40:00 AM
Another great piece and there's a good lesson in it for many to ponder too. So sorry if this is not fiction, but I hope in that case you learnt a valuable lesson fast... You've a mighty sword within your pen poet. Kindest thoughts and thanks as ever for your comments...Anna-Marie.
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Date: 2/28/2010 1:24:00 PM
Didn't you realise,there was the milkman,when you left?;)..and then she diid the caos..:)How couls she..I know this is fiction,If its not im sorry for the mess,,You both messed..She being the way she is and you,you misbehaved badly..If you cheated,she did well,AT least she let you in:)..enjoyed reading..tnks for your kind comments..Charma
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Date: 2/26/2010 11:25:00 AM
You one of them too huh...Good poem...And for the answer to your question....BOTH!!....Marty
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Date: 2/26/2010 10:38:00 AM
There's no excuse for someone destroying your property, Jared. When we are hurt, we do things we shouldn't, but this is criminal activity. Knowing you feel so much regret though, you probably won't report her. Just be sure you change the locks on the doors. Powerful poem that raises my concern for your safety. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/26/2010 4:48:00 AM
Been down this old road a time or two, good write..thanks f His Will, glad that you liked it Danny
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Date: 2/25/2010 10:40:00 PM
if true, you're bad,if not, so sad,I've been had,,anyway I have unfortunately lived this in someways,i was cheated on and I had my revenge,,,though I learned to wrongs don't make it right,,,but I do want to say your words reflect the talent and emotional flow of power of the word,,great writing,,I also want to Thank you for reading and commenting upon mine,,,Blessings...Cecil
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Date: 2/25/2010 10:05:00 PM
been there, and the ending could not have been said better. really enjoyed this, even though it brought back aome bad memories of my own
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Date: 2/25/2010 9:38:00 PM
A lesson learned-if this is true. Great write as usual. Peace, Audrey
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Date: 2/25/2010 7:32:00 PM
Live and learn my friend .. hard lessons the hard way.. brings me back to memories of the days of my upheavals .. consequences are extreme when luv is involved.. a great insight to an emotional write.. if true.. I feel bad... if not .. good but sad... recovery immanent..luv.."Sweetheart"
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Date: 2/25/2010 1:31:00 PM
Liked this one too. Have you ever been to Atlantic City or Myrtle Beach, both have boardwalks. I wrote about Myrtle Beach and Leaving Bruce is about my ex. I can relate. Ellen
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Date: 2/25/2010 11:39:00 AM
Must be a day for cheaters lucky you didn't get what my lady dished out hehehe. But joking aside Jared a great write, loved it....Thanks for your comments on mine today.......Allie
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Date: 2/25/2010 11:32:00 AM
you wouldn't? She wouldn't? Is the wild bill's a restaurant? or a fitness place? Keep at the writing you are young enough to make it a career. you definately have the talent!! Great imagination too!!
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Date: 2/25/2010 11:27:00 AM
Jared tell me this is not true so I can laugh. I truly enjoyed this write in more ways then one. She has more guts then I ever had. Love, Carol
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