Just James Poet Shape

Love Vortex

love bleeds into me and now becomes life 
 Light fractures into rainbow’s  not  hate 
   Warm rises  from  my  lonely black  
     Rain summers life from past cold  
       Old  tear  filled  eyes  now  dry 
        Soft dreams make me young 
              Single    was    hard       
                 Two now pair 
                     We’re one 
                        Love 


” spiraling effect” of vortex by antonyms in following line 

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Jannie Breedt December 28, 2016 at 11:30 PM Excêllent! Its like the Venturi effect and very alluring. Apparently when you drain yor bathh for instance the whirl turns clockwise and anti-clockwise in the Southern hemisphere are visa versa and I have absolutely no idea why I am telling you this Jannie Just James December 29, 2016 at 12:06 AM Thanks Jannie...its only seen with air flow as Coriolis force so weak it hardly affects water flow...:)

Adeniji Toluwalope Gideon December 22, 2016 at 1:14 PM Beautiful! Absolutely incredible! I have learnt a lot from your poem James. Thank you for sharing. Much love, Adeniji Just James December 22, 2016 at 11:49 PM Thank you so much Adeniji! And thank you for the visit.

Jean Murray December 15, 2016 at 5:53 PM Just the most romantic piece. Or two pieces...becoming one. Beautiful James. Just James December 19, 2016 at 1:46 PM Thank you so much Jean!

Jan Allison December 15, 2016 at 2:00 AM WOW James my head's in a whirl - I have never seen this style before I love the opposing words on allternating lines :-) how creative my friend:-) hugs jan xx Just James December 15, 2016 at 1:25 PM Thank you so much for your kind words! All for the visual effect! And of course to focus on the eye of the storm!

Charlie Smith December 14, 2016 at 11:55 AM Great work James, never have even attempted Shapes. I have a hard enough time with syllable counts... Just James December 15, 2016 at 1:22 PM Thank you Charlie..you are too modest!

Andrea Dietrich December 11, 2016 at 8:22 PM very cool form this is. Just James hmmm. I like that name. Is it for real? Just James December 11, 2016 at 11:02 PM Thank you Andrea...lets call it a flashback!

Chris Green December 9, 2016 at 7:11 AM This was amazing, well crafted and very creative. Nicely done James. Oh ...great message too. Just James December 10, 2016 at 5:16 AM Thank you very much Chris for your kind words!

Darren White December 9, 2016 at 4:48 AM WoW, I am seriously impressed. This looks incredibly difficult and ingenious! It is not just the shape of the vortex, but how beginning and end words oppose: love-hate; light-black; warm cold, and so on. Wonderful. 7 and fave Just James December 9, 2016 at 7:04 AM Based on Coriolis force this vortex "blows" in Northern hemisphere as it "turns counter clockwise"...crazy...but true!! "lefty loosy" Thanks for kind words Darren!

White Wolf December 9, 2016 at 12:51 AM Lovely James! Just James December 9, 2016 at 2:17 AM Thank you Rick!