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Love On the Planet Evon -Revised

The night descends quickly.
The bloody Evon’s moon rise
to its zenith leaving a red uneven path
on the choppy ocean surface.
Quickly I take my special pill
that will transform my legs into a tail.

Patiently I wait for her, tail splashing, 
laughter ringing over the glassy sea,
my mermaid riding gracefully 
over crested milky waves.

All lovers are asleep or hiding
to escape their fears that change
in the deadly night might bring. Not me.
Ah, she arrives and I’m in bliss.
We revel in the crimson Evon light,
surf giant white-tipped waves,
dive into the dark waters below.

We swim together, bathing off our cares,
the great Evon gives us strength. 
The sea songbirds soar o'er our heads,
thrill us with their lovely lullaby.
The waves pound the spiky crags
adding their haunting symphony.
Then will my love sing her haunting ditty,
As I go into a rapture of unbound passion.

I love the sea, the salty sea,
Painted red with Evon's moon,
far from the clutches of the mighty sun 
that burns and blotches my skin.
Let me glide down towards the seabed
below the inky surface and mingle
with fish and mollusks and mermaids,
especially the one I truly love.
This is perpetual bliss, paradise touched
To look over towards the far horizon,
isn't that our wishing star
shooting across the inky skies?
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022

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Rodrigues Avatar
September 22, 2022 at 7:26 AM
How lovely your dreams, imaginings, or are they real…after all! Dream on, sweet friend Victor! We dream with you!
Skelly Avatar
September 21, 2022 at 7:11 AM
Lovely ocean images...Delice
Mccann Avatar
September 20, 2022 at 3:45 PM
Remarkable poetry, Victor! I discovered you only when you commented on one of mine so now I have to catch up. Lucky me! Elizabeth
Kendrick Avatar
September 19, 2022 at 9:28 AM
An interesting love story told in poetic form. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. I do enjoy chocolate and I do eat chocolate. I don't have xocolatophobia as of this moment. Sara
Edmonds  Avatar
September 19, 2022 at 8:37 AM
An awesome fishy tale of love in the sea between a mermaid and merman, very creative, great imagination Victor… Belle
M  Avatar
September 19, 2022 at 7:28 AM
Another romantic beauty Victor…a wonderful tale….your imagination has no bounds! A beautiful poem I enjoyed reAding my friend! Debx
Seeker Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 9:32 PM
My, my! On land, in sea, love oozes. You’ve left out the air element, perhaps a romantic sequel awaits?
Andresen Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 1:32 PM
- Really enjoying this beautiful poem...everything came so alive...skillfully described, my friend Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Buehler Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 9:36 AM
This story is as magical as a fairytale, Victor. Imaginative and fun to read. :)
Dietrich Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 8:32 AM
Very creative work, Victor. Did you ever see the movie Splash? I love mermaid romance stories!
Buhagiar Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 10:02 AM
Yes, I saw the film quite a long time ago.
Tor Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 7:45 AM
Lovely imagination Victor that mermaid was fortunate to have your company with her in the deep blue sea. I enjoy reading your wonderful creative mind you have. Gpood bless you my friend...
Poet Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 7:28 AM
Victor, your vivid and detailed description makes the imaginary trip to Evon a magical and lovely experience. I trust you had a wonderful time soaring on the waves of your mind during this seafaring love story.
May Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 6:51 AM
A romantic story where lovers find passion in the sea, Very nicely penned Victor
Pandit Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 5:29 AM
Enjoyed the ride on the wings of your imagination, Victor. Lovely details enhance the journey to Evon in flight of fantasy, enchanting as a dream. Excellent depiction my friend.
Cunningham Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 3:41 AM
Great story telling Victor, you have great imagination. Enjoy your Sunday. Tom
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