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Love Is Blind 2

(This a new Version created using many editing suggestions from Linda:) I picked you up like a “shiny” newly minted copper penny it was your kitten fur voice O how you would hate that... the avocado texture of it with which no matter what wild wicked hour I would call you you would answer You shimmered like sunlight on the forest floor of my needles of neediness glinted off the shiny chrome and twilight blinders of my “made to order” searcher’s soul You were the perfect portent with your torrents of torment to wash clean my jet and emerald caves Or was it you who found me? a white gem silent, hidden behind my poetry sitting in a seat in that Inn listening to the hues of blues stenciling the deep red shards of my heart onto the unlined pages of a blank black journal I wore cool light blue and soft sheet cotton like a cloud-kissed sky I was light as air and as deep as “a thousand leagues under the sea” You became my heroic touchstone, my one true thing sapphire-sparked rock of glory I hung you around my neck oxen yoked myself with the weight of you I hung myself faithfully -to “my cross to bear” your endless denial of our love. You were lithe…thin as a straw… tall as a poplar white as ash and grey as coal except for the orange hot fire in the center ring ....of your cigarette I mistook it for the flames of our unearthly love It was just the firmament of your eternal coolness reflecting back the stars of my own piercing need Yoked by my own wanton weave … I drove on blindly mind spider webbed the ghost of your emotion-less carcass draped around my neck “Leave no man behind” I know you laughed and told them that it was just a fire pit left in a cave by the Queens of the Stone Age -Some loud, angry band you loved Less real to you by far more ethereal and ever lost in time to me than the new found “writing on the wall”

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Date: 3/30/2016 5:13:00 PM
Ingrid, I love and enjoy the extension and, of course, you allowing me to edit a few things. I will Favorite this poem because it's an honor to work with anyone who's willing to share the gift of poetry. Love LINDA
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Ingrid Showalter Swift
Date: 3/31/2016 7:39:00 AM
Linda Your advice was dead on right and I knew it...Kinda wish we could publish the edit version you wrote too but let's wait a minute ...too much of this one poem LOL 3 versions seems a bit much all at once. I would love to do an intentional co-write as you suggest! Ingrid

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