Lotus Minerva


She's a diamond sun of snow, envied by venus, lifting her peacock eyelashes to stargaze beyond pinkish petals of mild moonrise, enclosing rusts of rosy jealousy in ancient ruins like lotus Minerva.
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Fowler Avatar
February 6, 2024 at 10:12 AM
I love how you have likened Minerva to the beauty and resilience of the lotus. Very nice Hiya. I'm taken by her "...peacock eyelashes..." :)
Empress Avatar
January 27, 2024 at 5:28 AM
I resonated with this poem for some reason, and i cant help but admire so much of what you’ve conveyed here in such brilliant metaphors using symbolism too, creative and clever. I especially love the lines “ envied by venus” “ to stargaze beyond pinkish petals of mild moonrise, “ brilliant use of alliterations as well as adjectives. You have an artistic way of expressing which is unique! Congratulations on your well deserved win. You always know what i like! Thank you for sharing this
M  Avatar
January 25, 2024 at 11:06 AM
How very beautifully you write sweet Hiya….such talent from such a kind soul! Debx
Buehler Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 3:16 PM
Your exquisitely beautiful poem thrills with its colorful images, Hiya. It is a fave. Blessings and hugs. :)
Herrick Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 12:26 PM
I can see this enchanting feeling, scene, idea in many colors and ways. Poetically potent serum, Hiya.
Roper Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 11:42 AM
Nicely done in the information on mythology on lotus Minerva. Enjoyed reading.. Many blessings my friend
Bell Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 11:10 AM
Something tells me many a man has fallen under that spell.
Dietrich Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 10:02 AM
Someone did this is mythology but I took it as a flower. Is it personification then? So lovely
Sharma  Avatar
January 23, 2024 at 6:55 AM
Dear Andrea, Minerva is actually the Goddess of wisdom and knowledge, it actually relates to mythology and yes, I added lotus here to personify the qualities, so it can be considered as personification as well as a metaphor :) Thank you so much for reading and for your kind words, I truly appreciate it ~ sending love & light!
Beaufort Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 2:24 AM
Well you've really described someone beautiful. If I weren't married and committed to that relationship, I would have to seek her out and see if I could get a date! Funny how there are some planetary references used above. A very memorable piece!
Buhagiar Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 1:53 AM
Great Greek mythology. Minerva was upright and good.
Ashley Avatar
January 21, 2024 at 6:08 PM
Dear Hiya, my heart's imagination is elated by your soulful, ethereal and celestial imageries created by your golden poetic pen. "Peacock eyelashes" is breathtaking! To be "envied by Venus" is enrapturing! Your brilliant artistry is framed perfectly in the Fibonacci form. Lush and luscious poetry, my sweet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Poet Avatar
January 21, 2024 at 3:55 PM
Dear Hiya, your exquisite poem transcends the boundaries of time and space, transporting us to a mesmerizing realm filled with ancient ruins and bygone eras. This remarkable Fibonacci composition captivates my senses, as I vividly envision the majestic peacock eyelashes gracefully unfurling to behold the celestial wonders. Your artistic prowess shines brilliantly in this piece, skillfully interweaving elements of mythology into this enchanting literary creation.
Hind Avatar
January 21, 2024 at 3:50 PM
Gorgeous writing, I could see her rising...
Rose  Avatar
January 21, 2024 at 11:36 AM
You take us across time and space with your beautiful poem winning wishes dear friend :)
Greenhough Avatar
January 21, 2024 at 10:08 AM
A beautiful poem that came alive when I could visualize the peacock eyelashes lifting to stargaze. Ancient ruins took me to a different world of ages past. This Fibonacci rocks.
May Avatar
January 21, 2024 at 8:04 AM
I like how you intertwined mythology in this lovely write, Best wishes
Kendrick Avatar
January 21, 2024 at 7:23 AM
Your talent shines in this one. Way to go if for the contest. Reads like a good contender to me. Your visits to my pages add a new dimension. Sara K
Pandit Avatar
January 21, 2024 at 6:38 AM
Splendidly done, Hiya. Your prowess shines in brevity of this form. Loved your poem--the two ending lines, superbly crafted.
One Avatar
January 21, 2024 at 5:55 AM
Interesting adjective 'lotus Minerva', How would anyone not be jealous of someone so divine.. Your theme is a great choice for this form and has nice imagery using words like 'pinkish petals of moonrise' and peacock eyelashes, I bet Ink will love this one.. Best of luck in the contest dear poetess..
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