Lotus

oops dear poetess 
you were too drunk to notice 
my lovely lotus


Yay, I did it! The challenge was to write a rhymed iambic haiku. Here it is)

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Connie Marcum Wong

December 8, 2020 at 12:13 PM

I miss you dear friend. Please come back. Blessings xxoo

Quoth Theraven

May 2, 2020 at 11:31 PM

Kurt, The lotus is still remembered. -Richard

Connie Marcum Wong

January 18, 2020 at 12:23 AM

My name on this site is Lotus Kurt, so I had to giggle. Very good! xxoo

Richard Lamoureux

January 4, 2020 at 9:07 AM

It appears you did. Well done poetic one!

Quoth Theraven

January 3, 2020 at 11:40 PM

Kurt, The lotus will be remembered. Well done. -Richard

Andrea Dietrich

December 19, 2019 at 7:42 PM

Not sure if it is completely iambic but it's a REALLY COOL KU!!

Gershon Wolf

December 15, 2019 at 7:50 PM

Splendid! Love the rhymes, esp. 'notice.' ~ Gershonovich

Kurt Ravidas

December 20, 2019 at 6:17 AM

Thanks, Wolf)

Lin Lane

December 14, 2019 at 10:28 PM

Yep, you certainly did. Now all you have to do is add an 'o' on the first to in the second line and it's a wrap. Very nice, Kurt. My hat is off to ya.

Lin Lane

December 15, 2019 at 4:49 AM

Thank you on both counts. This little rhyming iambus was a fun adventure. Thanks for driving us there.

Kurt Ravidas

December 15, 2019 at 4:07 AM

Ooops, lost one. Thank you, Lin. I see you're not only a great poet, but also a good source of inspiration)