Lost Tear Sobs

L ow clouds droop as she sits on rumpled gown 
O aths of pale secrets falling through ravaged sleeves
S omber cheeks line a hollowed tract, cast down
T iredness all around; steep as barb- wired leaves. 

T ainted droplet hides on eyelid’s corner
E ncasing her passages streaked with pain,
A s black stars perch on withered flowers
R eflecting shadows ruptured, glimpses wane.

S ilently her thoughts prick sparse winds, to blow
O pening dam of jarred beats from love’s past haze;
B eyond snuffed wails, lost tear plunges full flow
S ullen as thorns, she weeps in requiem sways. 




Black-Eyed Susan's Lost Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Merryman Avatar
June 5, 2015 at 4:59 PM
Nette, congrats on having your poem featured on Soup's home page this week! An excellent acrostic! Love, KIm
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June 2, 2015 at 11:16 PM
NETTE, Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. SKAT love
Brown Avatar
August 10, 2012 at 6:37 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Susan's "Lost" contest Nette. Love, Carol
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August 9, 2012 at 8:56 PM
nette.. congratulations with your awesome win. Hoping to read many contest tonight. always~ ;-) PD
Johnson Avatar
August 8, 2012 at 6:47 PM
I'm glad to share a placment with you. Your poems always have a drama that I envy. Love, Joyce
Dietrich Avatar
August 8, 2012 at 2:54 PM
A great melancholy one that I had not yet seen. Glad to see it on susan's winners' list, nette. Congratulations.
Ramage Avatar
August 8, 2012 at 1:15 PM
Congratulations Nette on this win. Your poems are always so deep. Well done. Lee
Susan Avatar
August 8, 2012 at 10:18 AM
Congrats on your win in my contest! a beautiful write :)
Mac Donald Avatar
August 8, 2012 at 5:57 AM
Great metaphor and imagery creates an austere scene of utter despair. Well done, Nette! Wishing you luck with this creative write! Hugs to you, Mikki :)
Minardi Avatar
August 7, 2012 at 11:38 PM
A very wonderful writing, Nette. A very sad and heartfelt acrostic. thanks for stopping by and your kind comment, u made me smile :) Hugss, Dinda.
Kendrick Avatar
August 6, 2012 at 2:14 PM
Interesting work for the contest..Reads like a winner to me..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by my work..Sara
Williams Avatar
August 6, 2012 at 1:25 PM
Nette, quite wonderful, good luck...David soup mail...
Conway Avatar
August 6, 2012 at 9:05 AM
Wonderful write Nette, it's sure to place well!~Tirzah~
Nair Avatar
August 6, 2012 at 8:45 AM
A brilliant piece.enjoyed, huggs:) Jag
Sivey Avatar
August 6, 2012 at 8:04 AM
Wow, Nette, you sure have written a quiet masterpiece here my friend! I love this sombre piece so wondrously put on paper! I can imagine the "Sullen as thorns, she weeps in requiem sways" as powerful as you have written it! You just look at the rest of the poem and put that last line with it and it stands out so much! I really love your incredible poem my friend! Gloriously done! Great Work!!
Sivey Avatar
August 6, 2012 at 8:10 AM
I forgot to mention Nette, good luck in this contest, you will do very well!
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August 6, 2012 at 7:34 AM
Truly a winner Nette!!!! Love "tainted droplets hides on eyelids corner."...excellent imagery!!!
Horsman Avatar
August 6, 2012 at 6:03 AM
Oh nette this is truly wonderful. harry
Andresen Avatar
August 6, 2012 at 4:14 AM
Agree with Kash....very touching poem Nette - well done. - Have a lovely day. - Luck in contest!!!! - oxox love // Anne-Lise
Poet Avatar
August 6, 2012 at 2:12 AM
Do you know Santiago Villafania ,a poet from Phillipines?
Poet Avatar
August 6, 2012 at 2:10 AM
Ohh...this is a very touching write Nette...love the Acrostic very much!
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