Lost Tear Sobs

L ow clouds droop as she sits on rumpled gown 
O aths of pale secrets falling through ravaged sleeves
S omber cheeks line a hollowed tract, cast down
T iredness all around; steep as barb- wired leaves. 

T ainted droplet hides on eyelid’s corner
E ncasing her passages streaked with pain,
A s black stars perch on withered flowers
R eflecting shadows ruptured, glimpses wane.

S ilently her thoughts prick sparse winds, to blow
O pening dam of jarred beats from love’s past haze;
B eyond snuffed wails, lost tear plunges full flow
S ullen as thorns, she weeps in requiem sways. 




Black-Eyed Susan's Lost Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 6/5/2015 4:59:00 PM
Nette, congrats on having your poem featured on Soup's home page this week! An excellent acrostic! Love, KIm
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Date: 6/2/2015 11:16:00 PM
NETTE, Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. SKAT love
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Date: 8/10/2012 6:37:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Susan's "Lost" contest Nette. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/9/2012 8:56:00 PM
nette.. congratulations with your awesome win. Hoping to read many contest tonight. always~ ;-) PD
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Date: 8/8/2012 6:47:00 PM
I'm glad to share a placment with you. Your poems always have a drama that I envy. Love, Joyce
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Date: 8/8/2012 2:54:00 PM
A great melancholy one that I had not yet seen. Glad to see it on susan's winners' list, nette. Congratulations.
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Date: 8/8/2012 1:15:00 PM
Congratulations Nette on this win. Your poems are always so deep. Well done. Lee
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Date: 8/8/2012 10:18:00 AM
Congrats on your win in my contest! a beautiful write :)
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Date: 8/8/2012 5:57:00 AM
Great metaphor and imagery creates an austere scene of utter despair. Well done, Nette! Wishing you luck with this creative write! Hugs to you, Mikki :)
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Date: 8/7/2012 11:38:00 PM
A very wonderful writing, Nette. A very sad and heartfelt acrostic. thanks for stopping by and your kind comment, u made me smile :) Hugss, Dinda.
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Date: 8/6/2012 2:14:00 PM
Interesting work for the contest..Reads like a winner to me..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by my work..Sara
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Date: 8/6/2012 1:25:00 PM
Nette, quite wonderful, good luck...David soup mail...
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Date: 8/6/2012 9:05:00 AM
Wonderful write Nette, it's sure to place well!~Tirzah~
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Date: 8/6/2012 8:45:00 AM
A brilliant piece.enjoyed, huggs:) Jag
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Date: 8/6/2012 8:04:00 AM
Wow, Nette, you sure have written a quiet masterpiece here my friend! I love this sombre piece so wondrously put on paper! I can imagine the "Sullen as thorns, she weeps in requiem sways" as powerful as you have written it! You just look at the rest of the poem and put that last line with it and it stands out so much! I really love your incredible poem my friend! Gloriously done! Great Work!!
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Date: 8/6/2012 8:10:00 AM
I forgot to mention Nette, good luck in this contest, you will do very well!
Date: 8/6/2012 7:34:00 AM
Truly a winner Nette!!!! Love "tainted droplets hides on eyelids corner."...excellent imagery!!!
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Date: 8/6/2012 6:03:00 AM
Oh nette this is truly wonderful. harry
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Date: 8/6/2012 4:14:00 AM
Agree with Kash....very touching poem Nette - well done. - Have a lovely day. - Luck in contest!!!! - oxox love // Anne-Lise
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Date: 8/6/2012 2:12:00 AM
Do you know Santiago Villafania ,a poet from Phillipines?
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Date: 8/6/2012 2:10:00 AM
Ohh...this is a very touching write Nette...love the Acrostic very much!
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