Brenda Chiri Poet Free verse

Lost My Heart

Lost My Heart

The blue sparkling waters 
rippled under the 
scorching sun
We laid soaking up the hot
rays as wet droplets 
evaporated from our flesh
Our hair slicked back,
dark from its wet coolness
We both laughed until
our hands accidentally 
touched sending chills 
over my spine
I shivered despite the
heat of that day
When we gazed into
each other's eyes 
Our carefree laughter
turned into nervous 
giggles as we both 
became aware of the other
It's that day that I fell 
in love with you 
Lost in your deep green eyes 
drowning as I tried to swim, 
yet it was a lost cause
for my heart was forever 
lost that hot summer day
so very long ago....


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Susan Ashley June 27, 2019 at 10:43 PM Ah, my dear twin, this is a tender nostalgic beauty that captivates me with its emotional imagery. Loved it! Your heart shines in the exquisite light of your lovely poem. Congratulations on your excellent win, my crazy talented sis. Love and hugs, your admiring, sane other half.. ~Susan Brenda Chiri June 28, 2019 at 4:04 PM THANK I dear sissy!;) it is always duch s pleasure when you stop by!;)

Connie Marcum Wong June 26, 2019 at 12:16 PM Romance soars in this lovely first place winner Brenda. Congratulations on your deserving win! : ) Brenda Chiri June 26, 2019 at 2:23 PM Connie thank you so very much! I do appreciate your warm comments!;)

Gershon Wolf June 25, 2019 at 8:53 PM So movingly romantic, truly worthy of a win in Brian's contest. Kudos. :) gw Brenda Chiri June 26, 2019 at 2:29 AM Ahh Gershon thank you ! I so appreciate it so very much!;)

Vijay Pandit June 25, 2019 at 7:39 PM Excellent write Brenda..emotive..romantic..congrats for your #1 win in Brian's contest. Brenda Chiri June 26, 2019 at 2:28 AM Vijay thank you so very much! I must say I'm not use to placing with Brian! Before I couldn't place for the life of me! Haha! Yours was a winner too and great one too !;)

Richard Lamoureux June 25, 2019 at 9:23 AM What a lovely depiction of the blossoming of young love. Brenda Chiri June 25, 2019 at 9:47 AM Thank you Rick your words mean so much to hear! Appreciation is a mild word because I so enjoy when one can feel what I write and how I described it!;)

John Fleming June 25, 2019 at 8:58 AM Wayne is quite right when he asks: "are you getting better each time out"?? Answer: most definitely yes!! You really have managed to put the reader right "into" that "end" moment...a truly brilliant finale. I am very impressed, Brenda...very impressed indeed. Lots of affection as ever. :) john Brenda Chiri June 25, 2019 at 9:45 AM Lol John it thrills me that you think that! Again your words are so welcomed! See I have been trying to be a bit more descriptive and I guess it is working because what every poets end result is to make the reader feel as if they were there! John are you bias?;) I will take it though!;) All my affection B;)