Lost Love

(Note: taken from a diary of a young lady)
 
In memoriam of Jose` Maria
aged twenty, drowned.
 
I lounge on an uneven stone
under the uneasy shade 
of an ancient carob tree,
away from the hot rays 
of the summer sun.
I sit alone, abandoned,
I contemplate in vain,
for my thoughts wander on you,
who left me in the lurch.
 
I stare vacantly towards
the mighty sea that 
like a cyclone of frigidness
buffets the darkened rocks 
that form the inlet. 
Wave after wave 
enters the narrow strait
and rumble onwards
to the horrendous shore
throwing iridescent sprays
over the plaque of cold hard marble
that hides a tragedy of life.
 
Under the Iberian sky
prickly pears ripen
a stone's throw away 
from the glinting shore
amid the green olive trees
slightly wet with sea spray.
The plaque seems to glow 
in the hot summer rays.
 
I wonder what made Jose` Maria
swim in that turbulent sea.
Maybe he searched for treasure lost,
or hunted for the slippery octopus,
or mourned over lost love.
A life destroyed.
 
Am I not astray too? 
I am so far away from you, 
forsaken and unloved,
for you are like the sea, drowned 
in a cyclone of frigidness.
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Velasco Avatar
August 6, 2025 at 2:23 PM
This is hauntingly beautiful, Victor. It reads like a whispered grief from the past, with such vivid Mediterranean imagery—“the cyclone of frigidness,” “under the Iberian sky,”—all so atmospheric. The mourning feels quiet but deep, like the sea itself. Truly moving work.
Manassian Avatar
August 6, 2025 at 6:44 AM
You write so well! It conjurs up images in one's mind so vividly. That is the sign of a good writer. It leaves one wanting to know more of the tragic story. Thank you for sharing and thank you for your recent visit to my page.
Winter Avatar
August 5, 2025 at 10:37 PM
Dear Victor, you are a truly brilliant poet! Your poem is a hauntingly beautiful tribute to a lost love. The imagery is vivid and evocative, transporting the reader to the rugged coastline and the somber mood of the narrator. The narrator's longing and sense of abandonment are palpable, and the comparison of the lost love to the sea is a powerful metaphor.It's a poignant and moving piece that captures the pain of loss and the complexity of human emotions. Best, Anne
Godwin Avatar
August 5, 2025 at 7:26 PM
I'm confused and I don't want to be. You wrote poem based on a plaque? Poem is from someone's diary? It is a beautifully emotive, heart grabbing poem, Victor. I guess w/ my brain issues, I'm just lost concerning your notes. Very empathic write, I felt it. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
May Avatar
August 5, 2025 at 3:50 PM
A poignant verse, Well written
Williams Avatar
August 5, 2025 at 5:03 AM
Dearest Victor,your poem moved me deeply. There's such aching tenderness in every line—the sea, the stone, the silence—all mirroring the weight of loss. The imagery is vivid and almost sacred, especially around the plaque and the sea spray. You’ve captured grief not just as sorrow, but as solitude, questions left unanswered, and the vast, cold distance between memory and present...Hugs
Buehler Avatar
August 4, 2025 at 6:42 PM
This is a beautifully written poem, though tinged with the kind of sadness that is a part of life. I hope your week is nice.
Etgen-Baker Avatar
August 4, 2025 at 4:03 PM
an engaging and sad poem, Victor. I appreciate how relatable you made your last verse to the earlier verses in your poem. That's a great skill of your craft. Wishing you a blessed evening, Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
August 4, 2025 at 1:36 PM
There is a haunting beauty in this tale and a sadness that goes beyond one person’s loss. Hugs ~ Kim
Dietrich Avatar
August 4, 2025 at 10:55 AM
So interesting. It's hard to know if this was a man? I suppose it would be the diary entry of the woman he left behind then? Love the reference to the beautiful Iberia and the description of the shore.
Andresen Avatar
August 4, 2025 at 10:51 AM
- A very sad story ... - hugs
George Avatar
August 4, 2025 at 9:42 AM
A poem that tugs at my heartstrings. Did Jose Maria end his life intentionally or was it an accident? A very emotive poem, dear Victor. I wonder if this is for a contest. If so, all the Best.
Kendrick Avatar
August 4, 2025 at 9:02 AM
Whoa!!! The descriptiveness turns into an emotionally impacted ending. Yes, that had to be so hard on those left behind who cared for this young man. Was his drowning an accident, I wonder. Thanks for sharing your interpretation of the diary's entry. Sara K
Poet Avatar
August 4, 2025 at 2:00 AM
Deep emotions of loss and desolation as one reflects on the ocean, Victor, a symbol of those sentiments.
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