Lost

Here I lost in a midst Of darkest sky;
          the plane I rested therein carry
      me into the dark cloudiness, where
             It all of a sudden vanished.
             My soul deluges with haste
              like the rain falling from
      the blossomless sky. The stars that
             are to rescue me are brittle;
          throw at me their dimples smile

           You-----you engulfed my smile
             with your absorbing heart as
          leaves engulfed in the months 
           of  hottest sunshine.    Your
      warmth vows pore upon me icicles.


                Here I bury my head,
                  hope you see me,
               hope  you  see  me   in
               amidst of abyssal lake
            Originated from my eyes. 
                      I am sinking
                      I am sinking.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 9/14/2015 6:50:00 PM
VERy interesting and COOL imagery. I sure enjoyed this, my friend.
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Date: 9/11/2015 2:48:00 PM
Wonderful unique metaphor. [The stars that/are to rescue me are brittle; throw at me their dimple smile] Light & Love
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Date: 9/7/2015 5:23:00 AM
Lost in emotional pain, as everything looks dark and hopeless. Very expressive, Afolabi! But not all is lost....watch out for the lifeline! // paul
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Date: 9/6/2015 4:54:00 PM
Very powerful and full of emotion. Emile.
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Date: 9/6/2015 3:36:00 PM
Exquisite write, Afolabi , Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/6/2015 1:46:00 PM
This is indeed a powerful, brilliant piece, my friend, which reflects the dark depths to which the lost descend! Your imagery captivatingly pulled me into the despair and emotions experienced by the lost! Excellent write and a 7! Pandita
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Date: 9/6/2015 12:56:00 PM
Such a heartfelt write, AM...for every cloud is a silver lining...
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Date: 9/6/2015 12:46:00 PM
Very emotive with an outpouring from the heart of love for someone who seems to reject your love..I enjoyed reading your work..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 9/6/2015 7:46:00 AM
Poignant, and resounding work, I really enjoyed it... :)
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Date: 9/6/2015 6:55:00 AM
Sad write. I don't like to fly for that reason. You captured this write and put me there with your perfect words.
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Michael Tor
Date: 9/6/2015 6:56:00 AM
Excellent Afolabi
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