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Loose Me Asap

Gardening in a dress Figured it would be nice and breezy A red wasp had his way with my back side easy One little wasp caused alot of mess Ten stings/bites caused me alot of ouchy Then itching beyond control of sensitivity

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Curtis White

Date: 5/26/2011 8:57:00 PM

You are to be dressed in a garden.

Curtis White

Date: 5/26/2011 8:55:00 PM

I see you had to pay a price for this one. Very good.

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 4/14/2011 10:06:00 PM

You must be sweet! Sorry bout your Bee-hind. ~JSLambert

Stacey Watts

Date: 4/11/2011 4:13:00 PM

Ouch! I hope you are better. I do know how that feels and it does not feel good. This was really well written and thank you for your kind words.

Delysia Hendricks

Date: 4/10/2011 6:07:00 PM

Good one, Doris Your description is so vivid you have me itching all over. A well-written and entertaining piece.

Sidney Hall Mad Poet

Date: 4/10/2011 5:49:00 PM

I'll kiss it better :-)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/7/2011 8:59:00 AM

U thought right Doris and appreciate the passage as all are inspired by the Spirit of God and needed to exist on Earth... thankxx luv.. hope everyone is feeling fine ..

James Peranteau

Date: 4/7/2011 6:29:00 AM

This write has perfect flow dear poet ! I just love this one...to mine favz if ya don't mind Doris ! Have a blessed week....much love, james

James Foulk

Date: 4/6/2011 5:41:00 PM

i got one sting from a wasp and ouch. this was a cute liirle piece.

Harry Horsman

Date: 4/6/2011 5:01:00 PM

there as to be a moral here somewhere doris, love the poem, regards 'Purple Haze' the name in our area of Yorkshire comes from the purple heather on the moors, in certain light gives off a shimmering effect, long before Jimi Hendricks was around. thanks for you warm comments. Harry

Joe Maverick

Date: 4/6/2011 4:52:00 PM

Oh! well Doris you could look on this as a suffering for your Art episod'e in which case i prescribe a compress of baking-soda, hope you don't mind my levity today?

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/6/2011 4:50:00 PM

Yikes!! I'm so afraid of wasps and bees, Doris. I see the humor in this poem, but feel sorry for you if this really happened. Scary to even think about this. Love you, Carolyn

Daver Austin

Date: 4/6/2011 1:56:00 PM

This is ouchy. I know because I have been stung. Funny, but I can put my hand into a swarm of bees and nothing happens. But wasps? OUCH! Love, daver

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/6/2011 4:51:00 AM

Oh how awful if true Doris and hope u are feeling better than ouchy now.. great creative lines and soon wasp season will be in full bloom especially as temps rise up.. a wonderful bit of sweet humor early morn read luv.. hope u and Mom are doing well luv..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/5/2011 2:24:00 PM

I like how ASAP also looks like wasp. Very clever. And also looks like the word for where he could bite ya from behind. haha. Adorable and fun to read!!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/5/2011 1:03:00 PM

Thank you for sharing your outstanding poetry Doris. I enjoyed reading it and hope to read more of it soon. May you always find the inspiration to continue with your writing endeavors. Love, Carol

Timothy Brumley

Date: 4/5/2011 12:30:00 PM

Ouch! It's never a good idea to garden in a dress, pants are a gardeners dress, unless of course your trying to attract another kind of bee that has a more pleasant sting:) I enjoyed our chat, call again sometimes.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/5/2011 11:21:00 AM

Enjoyed reading your work about a bad event in your life...I hope that does not happen again..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..I have posted my contest..Make sure you read it all the way down so that you can get all the rules and regulations..Mom